rate_review Reviews

>"I am officially working on the next chapter, though. It will be out this month."

I wonder if he just lies, something honestly obstructs him, or if he just forgets what the word 'deadline' means.

My review for arc i feel covers most of arc two, except i'd have to find a way to work "Epic" into each sentence twice at the very least,
You worked legend and folklore into the story in the most beautiful of fashions, and it was absoluteley enthralling. The way you transformed everything into a legend reminiscient of a child's bedtime story, except a thousand times more serious and enthralling:it was purely amazing. If it weren't for copyright laws etc, i would completely suggest selling this story on the common market. Hell, maybe you could sell it to nintendo and they could start making adult pokemon fiction, instead of it being restricted to sites filled with sex-mad 13-year-olds named jason. And of course, I have to throw a couple of compliments at Rocketto Dan. Beautiful. Amazing. Pure evil to teh point of no return. Their projects to recreate old weaopoms get a thumbs-up. Their Black Thirteen:Thumbs up. The fact that Giovanni may know everything that Slash is telling Kiako about The Shadow:even better, Giovanni you cunning creature of the night.
The only thing I could POSSIBLY say negatively about this story is thatt i think it is bogus that Sai's pokemon were defeated by a noob gym leader's pokes. I think it would've brought incredible plot turns to the story if all of flannery's pokemon died but she managed to get away somehow. That would probably have to require the assisytance of another individual coming, or slash's team would probably get the floor absolutely wiped with them.

Looks like Act 2's not getting finished this year, then.

i must say this story is getting good ,I mean its been good its just getting better . As for the greatest one its gotta be arceus , for without him there is nothing hes created almost everthing in the world of pokemon , and is the most poweful of all of them . Giritina as the shadow makes alot of sense , but we will have to see what slash cooks up afterall

Finally, I have caught up with everyone! YAY!I'm probably the most naive and innocent person on this site to ask this, but I hope that the next chapter doesn't involve the two mains humping like bunnies with Viagra in their carrots. I would really enjoy it more if there was more character development, plus a rematch with the Master of Thunder after our heroes are healed. If you do decide on some reward and stress relif sex, that is perfectly understandable, but I'm probably being all antsy for no reason, you are not stupid, and all the chapters since the desert have had no sexual interaction. I know this is an erotic fiction site, but I really like how when you go there, or give hints of how it went there, it is more about playing off the emotions of your heart, not your groin. And unlike a couple reviewers, I will not give you the update or die shortness, I'll give you my steadfast patients for the next chapters arrival. You can't rush this kind of thing. Please keep up the good work, as I have been without sleep sense I started reading the Sinners story line. Chapter 13 alone took about 2 days to read, but it was soooooooo worth it. Untill the next chapter comes out, I'll catch you later.

reading chapter 10 at almost 1 in the morning, was probably not the smartest idea, scared the shit out of me, but I don't care! Must move on!

when i watched this vid it made me think of the shadow just pure evil.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=JOQOSBoBh3E&feature=sub

With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae

You sir, are evil! Evil, evil, evil! In a good way. Before I start slinging names at how Slash is an idiot (oops, too late!), I figured I'd tell you about some thoughts I had. The Shadows actions, seem very VERY similar to the actions of Giratina in ancient times. Could it be that this whole Stor takes place before team galactic? Before Arceus came and sealed Giratina itself for it's actions? Giratina is capable of the things that the Shadow is capable off, and as it's a ghost, it could posses people. Jarachi wouldn't stand a chance against it either when it was at full power. I could be wrong, but usually demons are human representations of real creatures, and I think that the Origin Form of Giratina looks pretty demonic. But that made me think...what of Palkia and Dialga, they are surely more powerful than Rayquaza, Groudon, and Kryogre. Beings of Spacial and Temporal control. If they showed up, the world would certainly be in a pickle now wouldn't it?

chapter 8, I have reached the end of chapter 8 and I am scared to read any more, this is so dark and tragic, but so brilliantly written. I have charged myself with getting to where you have currently ceased writing, I must know what happens. The sex and eroticism has now taken second place in my mind, I must read the story, and see what happens. It has gotten to the point where I skip any sex to get to story, I am afraid for the pair, I really am. I want a happy ending so bad, but I know now that might be like cheating death, or cheating the readers. I see hope for one, but that seems to be what your story is about, hope. Please continue to write, as I am now tied to these characters, and need to see what happens to them. Good luck! Catch you later!

finished chapter 3 of arc 2. That was epic! There is one thing that bothers me, you say you suck at doing battles, and I say you're wrong. Y are just as capable of writing battles as you are of writing fluff and sex. This just makes the story all the more potent. I was seriously on edge during the battle, and the part where you went into the perspectives of the pokemon was quite nifty, and ballsy to do. I sincerely hope you respond to my reviews and the e-mail I sent because Iwant to get to know you as a writer, maybe you could even help me? Nah, that's too much to ask for, but hey. Keep up the good work, and don't be so self criticizing! Catch you later.