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April 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh I've been following and chasing but I only now got the opportunity to reveiw this story and yes ironically it happened on the chapter where they finally got together. But that's ok any reveiw is a step forward and never backwards right? Well unless it's a flame but I promise I will nevr do that. This story is too perfect to ever deem any flaming and I am quite enjoying it. I'm glad that you are keeping it going for a good while. Thank you for writing this wonderful story and keep up the good work.
-L
-L
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April 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Alright good ummmm...Hot uhh....Smexy...yeah smexy not much plot here but i enjoyed it very much very sweet and realistic situation in this story i see L and Raito being very uhhh controlled at first soooo Yay....this should suffice for the extended udate period love this story can't wait to see where it's going next :)
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April 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Iyaaa! You have built up to chapter 14 so wonderfully! I've been reading this since chapter one and I feel its time to give you the praise you deserve. I love this story! Especially L as an artist, I could totally see that happening, oddly enough. But that last chapter; Light makes such a cute virgin XD and I love stories with L on top! This is coming along great! Can't wait to read more!
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April 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sorry, but this is the first time I'm reviewing your story but I had too since you gave us such a great chapter and asked so nicely. I personally liked this, especially Light's mental musing about how what he's doing equals to him being a man or not. Very much IC in my opinion. I also thought that the lemon was done nicely, I know I couldn't write man pr0n like this for sure. Can't wait for your next update.
Thanks!
Hime
Thanks!
Hime
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April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Simply wonderful chapter!! Great detail and an amazing lemon scene. I'm thoroughly satisfied. I will miss you next week, but since you have been such a wonderful author, in updating on a regular basis, you do deserve a break. If we haven't even hit the real plot yet then I am quite excited. I can't wait to see what happens next! XD.
*blushes* Geez, people who follow you to other sites...hmmm... *cough* livejournal *cough* that sounds very creeperish. >> << ^.^
*blushes* Geez, people who follow you to other sites...hmmm... *cough* livejournal *cough* that sounds very creeperish. >> << ^.^
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April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
that was so *melt into a puddle" hawt.
Normally, I am not a fan of LxRaito with L being the seme but for this fic, I def. do not mind.
<3 <3 <3
Normally, I am not a fan of LxRaito with L being the seme but for this fic, I def. do not mind.
<3 <3 <3
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April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Okay, truth be told I have been following this story for a while. Now however I'll let my presence be known and tell you what an awesome story you have going here. I often come on AFF just to check wether you have updated or not. I'm glad they two finally got going on some kind of relationship. I liked the chapter, the sex scene was pretty good. I felt sympathetic to poor Raito, the akwardness of the situation he found himself in came through pretty well, and it only got better. I would love to see what lies in store for the two.
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April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I rather liked this chapter and for more than just the lemon (it really would have been cruel of you to make us wait two weeks for this, btw). I found virginal Raito quite amusing and thought that you had just the right mix of steamy goodness and humor (a thing I find lacking in a lot of sex scenes these days. I know some people view sex as very serious and seriously sexy, but something funny inevitably happens).
Looking forward to the next chapter!
Looking forward to the next chapter!
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April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You didn't like this chapter? Good gawd, I loved it! =D 4200 words isn't that big. I've seen bigger chapters that go absolutely nowhere. =3
Keep it up, Hella-sama! And don't be so hard on yourself. ^w^
(Btw, thanks for showing me how big 4200 words is. I've been wondering about that. X3)
Keep it up, Hella-sama! And don't be so hard on yourself. ^w^
(Btw, thanks for showing me how big 4200 words is. I've been wondering about that. X3)
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April 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wtf, AFF is such a bitch sometimes. T_T;;
I had typed all this stuff for the review but it didn't post it? SIGHS.
Well, to summarise:
1) The chapter was good if not somewhat very awkward due to the fact that virgin!Raito was stumbling over EVERYTHING
>___>
2) Yay for more plot - likes plot very much (even more than the smex)
3) CRY for lack of update next week
4) Would like to see long chapters like this in the future. :)
Seriously, 2000 word chapters? That's like, torture. 4000 words win. XD
I had typed all this stuff for the review but it didn't post it? SIGHS.
Well, to summarise:
1) The chapter was good if not somewhat very awkward due to the fact that virgin!Raito was stumbling over EVERYTHING
>___>
2) Yay for more plot - likes plot very much (even more than the smex)
3) CRY for lack of update next week
4) Would like to see long chapters like this in the future. :)
Seriously, 2000 word chapters? That's like, torture. 4000 words win. XD