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Haha- first of all, I can just see Raito's frustration over L and his lack of comb. And, only naturally, L wouldn't have a comb. I hope L didn't miss him mastrubating in the time that he was going between the shower and the bathroom... of course, he has it on tape and can immortalize it on paint. Ahahaha. Too funny, too funny. Again, a wonderful chapter and such a tease of an ending ^^ I look forward to next week!~Ame

I KNEW IT! lol, prevy L, it's great n_n

woot, an update. Not bad but its so short compared to the first chapters! Heh, L is a pervert.

*KICKS*

Ok, all further politeness gone. I have one word for you: UPDATE.
Wait, let me chuck in another 3: WRITE LONGER CHAPTERS.
*is very demanding* :D

Really, you're evil. You can't leave your readers hanging like that. I mean, what?
*flails*

heeeheee why do I have a feeling raito was being surveiled and recorded the entire time? including the shower?

Lol!!!!

Having L paint him through imagination is extremely hottt--- and it's so L-like for L to buy the painting that he made, just because he didnt want anyone having it, just everyone seeing it. Hahaha!!! awww, the childish immature detective is so ic even in an ooc story! congratulations!

all the characters are ic in an ooc situation really. I even wished that some yaoi writer would make a manga out of this!

It'll be kind of sad if L painted a live nude Raito who's unconcious that he is being painted thought... It'll be tons way more hotter if the live nude was done with Raito concious he was doing it...... wink wink

gambatte on your next chap and pls upload faster!!!

x0x ayuni

yes, i've only reviewed, but I just read another fan's review on making Light seme, so Im going to make another review prodding you to make L seme-- why?

Because (pouts) if Light is seme in this story, it'll evaporate a lot of the fun out. :(


Althought it'll be kind of fun to have a naked hot and sweaty Raito as an aggressive seme, It'll be tons more hotter if Raito was an aggressive uke. L appreciates every contour in Raito's body, richer, and more perverted and childish. He sounds dryly like an uke-- which is to be expected- L always get roles as ukes, just because he is skinny, likes percentages, fair with big haunting eyes and a knack for sweets- And Raito always get the roles of the seme, because he is the almighty Kira, with brains And Brawn.

But this is not a Death note story--- so lets not stick to the same ideas of RaitoxL---

As much as Raito can be seme, he'll be great as uke too-- Big doe brown eyes at times, half lidded lust sumtimes, vixen smile, and an extremely hot body---
And as much as L can be uke, He'll Exceed as Seme too-- haunting obsidian eyes, a hot starving artist built, all pale and wiry muscles and his other weird eccentricities- Since he likes sweets so much, he probably could paint raito covered in whip cream and caramel and call it a "a light dessert'' or something-- with L seme, imaginations can run like riots ina rampage!!!

Dammit, sorry for wasting your time with my long winded ramble-- I Love this fluffy yet not too fluffly story ssososo much-- I hate it to be just like others!

gambatte on your nextt chap!! if you cant decide, take all the time you want! :D

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That was...beautiful ^^ Can't wait 'till the 'slaughter' XD

Hi! I meant to wait until I'd read what's here so far, and then reply, but! I was afraid my details would blur. So. My favorite parts so far (as of chapter three) were the description of L as a horror movie extra from the wrong side of town (or something to that effect) and the bit with Misa sniffing Raito's jacket. That cracked me up enough to quote it to my bemused roommate, who's never read Death Note and tolerates my babbles to her with remarkable patience. Anyway, I'm loving this fic! I adore the portrayal of L, he keeps making me grin. I can picture him as exactly that sort of artist. Also, the details you work in from the story are lovely-- the apple eraser, the stalker thing for Misa... wonderful! I'm really enjoying this, and will now continue reading it before my next review.

Will try to keep this review a bit shorter. The paintings? Killed. I think I almost fell out of my chair laughing at Raito's reactions...! I assumed L would end up painting him, but not that soon, or so... creatively.

So! Now I've read up to seven, and I adore your writing. L's characterisation is very entertaining, and I have this fear that the man kept his cameras-fetish and has some up in the shower. Raito would not be pleased, I think. I'm still actually smiling from reading this, and am looking forward to more.