rate_review Reviews

This was a lovely story all around, definitely capturing the "lovely" attitude of Fakir's that I remember from so long ago; and your portrayal of Ahiru, her mood, manner of speech and even the way you described her movements were outstanding. (That's another way of saying how jealous I am that you wrote her personality so well that even someone unfamiliar with the series would understand. :) ) The only thing that dinged my brain was that the whole mood changed once you had Fakir remember their previous two spontaneous "entanglements," so perhaps some hint would have helped at the beginning. Take that with a grain of salt though: maybe it was there and I missed it, since I've been known to miss important clues in people's words. Maybe I focused too much on Ahiru's reaction to his original complaints and forgot/hadn't yet remembered how naive she is.

The physical movements, even just as they moved around the room in the beginning, built up the heavy mood. (Is that the hint I missed?) and again was very much in-character. It flowed very well into the lead up to their physical affections and, after how Fakir modified that old game into something outstanding, the lovemaking was fantastic. I thoroughly enjoyed it.

I am enjoy! I was certainly wondering if anyone would update this section again with anything of any real caliber, and I'm glad someone did! I just love impatient aggressive Fakir, and Ahiru wanting to take charge but she just isn't ready yet! It comes with time, Honey, you'll get yous. And yes I am interested in this balance bar story you taunt us with. I mused with the idea of writing a balance bar story myself, but with a different pairing. Anyhow, I am totally not offended by the graphic nature of the content, in fact it pleases me greatly, and overall your story was very, very sexy.