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February 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
RoboRed---Ironically, considering this story, I don't like Valentine's very much. Too much commercial stuff. I was honestly considering highlighting this by having Slash buy Psymakio some flowers...and having her eat them, not understanding why humans give dead plants to each other, lol...
Maybe next time.
One of the reasons I stuck so much half-canon, half-hint stuff into this oneshot is to make up for how chapter 20 was SUPPOSED to be out at the beginning of February. Some of the events---Slash's "relay" communication with Pokemon, for example---weren't just one-off plot points, and will be coming up in Sinners rather soon.
Alternate grapefruit comment that I could have worked in: I don't like it when they squirt in your eye, though.
I decided to go with a confused what is a grapefruits, though, lol. Just cuter.
While Gardevoir is rather human-like, I don't know if a one-piece could hide the pure-white skin and green hair, lol.
Telekinetic sex is awesome. I can see further applications of it in true Sinners canon, heh. The rooftop scene followed me thinking to myself, "is Gardevoir really to wait patiently for this?" lolno
The original draft for this story included couples racing 'their' Luvdisc pairs---when I actually started writing it, though, it occurred to me that...well...that was fucking stupid, lol. Hence why it was cut out and replaced by a more serious conversation with some lesbian fish. :3
Water sex is always win; much easier...handling, lol. The pair may find the little cove in the real Sinners sometime, kukuku.
The Q+A is for plot points that I COULD answer in the story, but it would look awkward/not that good. The other Pokemon, for example---better to have them just sort of wander off than "let's bring them over here and do this with them" and distracting everyone from the storyline, lol.
Next time, Slash's team might go to SPARTAAAAAAAAA. They'll dine in hell.
*sigh* story archive. It's weird how I link to any site I want in the Myspace blog...but not anywhere else on the site. Their fail-filters don't even provide full coverage, lol. Wow.
Maybe next time.
One of the reasons I stuck so much half-canon, half-hint stuff into this oneshot is to make up for how chapter 20 was SUPPOSED to be out at the beginning of February. Some of the events---Slash's "relay" communication with Pokemon, for example---weren't just one-off plot points, and will be coming up in Sinners rather soon.
Alternate grapefruit comment that I could have worked in: I don't like it when they squirt in your eye, though.
I decided to go with a confused what is a grapefruits, though, lol. Just cuter.
While Gardevoir is rather human-like, I don't know if a one-piece could hide the pure-white skin and green hair, lol.
Telekinetic sex is awesome. I can see further applications of it in true Sinners canon, heh. The rooftop scene followed me thinking to myself, "is Gardevoir really to wait patiently for this?" lolno
The original draft for this story included couples racing 'their' Luvdisc pairs---when I actually started writing it, though, it occurred to me that...well...that was fucking stupid, lol. Hence why it was cut out and replaced by a more serious conversation with some lesbian fish. :3
Water sex is always win; much easier...handling, lol. The pair may find the little cove in the real Sinners sometime, kukuku.
The Q+A is for plot points that I COULD answer in the story, but it would look awkward/not that good. The other Pokemon, for example---better to have them just sort of wander off than "let's bring them over here and do this with them" and distracting everyone from the storyline, lol.
Next time, Slash's team might go to SPARTAAAAAAAAA. They'll dine in hell.
*sigh* story archive. It's weird how I link to any site I want in the Myspace blog...but not anywhere else on the site. Their fail-filters don't even provide full coverage, lol. Wow.
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February 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The opening was nice it just seemed to burst with lovely sweetness and cuteness I’m really glad that Gardevoir wasn’t hurt to badly. I really wonder just what the pink was whatever it doesn’t matter it seems like the kind of thing the world really needs especially in this day and age. Gardevoir in a bikini is just to cute to think about and the way she was embarrassed about showing it off was just beyond kawii.
Oh dear Goddess the stuff in the changing room just ahh.. Too hot for description it seemed almost like something out of a hentai but you made it classy and romantic.
About some off the stuff said in the dressing room I highly doubt I would have been able to hold back like Slash did and can we look forward to some role reversal in a future one shot. Another thing Slash needs to learn to control is his urge to tease her as cut and funny as it is it might get him in trouble.
Again you are the best writer on the site I say that because you made giving head seem as romantic as and erotic as making love and while orals always good both giving and receiving you make it seem I don’t know…Nope nothing other than loving and beautiful.
It seems that the Luvdic really do have some kind of power that humans don’t get and that Slash and Psymakio are more important than either of them realizes.
The one thing I didn’t like was the line about the volleyball to the face I’ve been hit by so many of those damn things that just hearing the name of the game makes my face hurt and unlike Slash I don’t have a loving partner to make me feel better. Oh and just a small note on grammar a pokemon’s name is for an individual or the whole species.
Okay now to end this review I LOVED THIS it was so good I just makes me want the next chapter all that much more and just one thing this made me think of something that I consider a personal belief Magic is real but it’s not what most people think when they hear that word rather it’s the union of the body and the soul it is an eternal connection that all share and depending on how it’s used can bring about a true perfect world or utter oblivion and I fear that the world is leaning more toward the latter than the former but like you said in this story there is hope it’s just must people find the darkness easier to use so that they can hide their own faults.
Lastly a great CD to listen to with any of the romantic parts of Sinners is anything by Corinne Bailey Rae she’s got a lovely voice and sweat lyrics that fit the mood pretty well.
With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
Oh dear Goddess the stuff in the changing room just ahh.. Too hot for description it seemed almost like something out of a hentai but you made it classy and romantic.
About some off the stuff said in the dressing room I highly doubt I would have been able to hold back like Slash did and can we look forward to some role reversal in a future one shot. Another thing Slash needs to learn to control is his urge to tease her as cut and funny as it is it might get him in trouble.
Again you are the best writer on the site I say that because you made giving head seem as romantic as and erotic as making love and while orals always good both giving and receiving you make it seem I don’t know…Nope nothing other than loving and beautiful.
It seems that the Luvdic really do have some kind of power that humans don’t get and that Slash and Psymakio are more important than either of them realizes.
The one thing I didn’t like was the line about the volleyball to the face I’ve been hit by so many of those damn things that just hearing the name of the game makes my face hurt and unlike Slash I don’t have a loving partner to make me feel better. Oh and just a small note on grammar a pokemon’s name is for an individual or the whole species.
Okay now to end this review I LOVED THIS it was so good I just makes me want the next chapter all that much more and just one thing this made me think of something that I consider a personal belief Magic is real but it’s not what most people think when they hear that word rather it’s the union of the body and the soul it is an eternal connection that all share and depending on how it’s used can bring about a true perfect world or utter oblivion and I fear that the world is leaning more toward the latter than the former but like you said in this story there is hope it’s just must people find the darkness easier to use so that they can hide their own faults.
Lastly a great CD to listen to with any of the romantic parts of Sinners is anything by Corinne Bailey Rae she’s got a lovely voice and sweat lyrics that fit the mood pretty well.
With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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February 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Black Whole---Heh, while this story is not canon in terms of the true Sinners storyline, many of the little hints do apply to it. I don't know why, but this oneshot just wanted to be a lot more...hinty...than How Many Licks Does It Take (which had absolutely no hints at all).
That's probably why it took so long...it's sort of chapter 20's parallel-dimension-self.
Imasuky Lomae---Gardevoir's injuries in this oneshot are the same as in the upcoming chapter 20: not significant. So you don't gotta worry about that, heh.
Interesting note: the telekinetic encounter was not planned when I started writing. It just sort of happened, lol.
Another interesting note: the oral on the roof was even more spontaneous---it wasn't thought up and written until my second proofreading of the chapter, heh. Originally there was just going to be water sex, but...well, one thing led to another. :-D
I forgot to mention the nosebleed comment, lol---making fun of the old anime standby of horny characters getting nosebleeds. I found myself writing that Slash almost passed out from one when Gardie almost popped out of her top, and I thought to myself, "wouldn't it be funny if it was from getting hit in the fucking face instead of horny?". So I did it. Heh. I regret nothing.
I liked the theme of this story...I believe that there's plenty of magic in the world, but most of it is ignored or unseen. One has to be open to see it...separating themselves from the busy bustle of daily life, relaxing and tuning themselves in with the background world...and every so often, you get a glimpse at something wonderful.
Anyway, I am currently enraged over Myspace's refusal to allow linking to AdultFanFiction.net---apparently their failures...er, filters...regard this site as spam. They proclaim to support the rights of artists...but only those artists who subscribe to their website. If this ticks you off too, send them an angry letter (or ten) and demand they fix their error and allow linking here. I'm sick of this relaying-through-outside-sites crap; I want to promote my artwork without having to site-bounce.
That's probably why it took so long...it's sort of chapter 20's parallel-dimension-self.
Imasuky Lomae---Gardevoir's injuries in this oneshot are the same as in the upcoming chapter 20: not significant. So you don't gotta worry about that, heh.
Interesting note: the telekinetic encounter was not planned when I started writing. It just sort of happened, lol.
Another interesting note: the oral on the roof was even more spontaneous---it wasn't thought up and written until my second proofreading of the chapter, heh. Originally there was just going to be water sex, but...well, one thing led to another. :-D
I forgot to mention the nosebleed comment, lol---making fun of the old anime standby of horny characters getting nosebleeds. I found myself writing that Slash almost passed out from one when Gardie almost popped out of her top, and I thought to myself, "wouldn't it be funny if it was from getting hit in the fucking face instead of horny?". So I did it. Heh. I regret nothing.
I liked the theme of this story...I believe that there's plenty of magic in the world, but most of it is ignored or unseen. One has to be open to see it...separating themselves from the busy bustle of daily life, relaxing and tuning themselves in with the background world...and every so often, you get a glimpse at something wonderful.
Anyway, I am currently enraged over Myspace's refusal to allow linking to AdultFanFiction.net---apparently their failures...er, filters...regard this site as spam. They proclaim to support the rights of artists...but only those artists who subscribe to their website. If this ticks you off too, send them an angry letter (or ten) and demand they fix their error and allow linking here. I'm sick of this relaying-through-outside-sites crap; I want to promote my artwork without having to site-bounce.
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February 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Late again? :P Bah, better late than never, I guess. Look at it this way, though: pink is still friggin everywhere at least 1-3 days after Valentines's Day is over, and there's plenty of leftover chocolate. :P Besides, it's better that you didn't sacrifice quality for punctuality. (as long as it's not 'too' late *glare*)
I read the e-mail you sent out when you posted this, and I agree, you did tie in dangerously close canonically (is that a word?). But of the most part, the oneshot retained it's own little storyline. I found it interesting that you made so many references to the teasers, though. And the thing with one of the luvdiscs talking to Slash, with part of it being heard as [....] like in the situation with the voice and the Interloper really stuck out at me. (still have no clue who that is, btw. :P)
And now, for points in the story:
Grapefruit comment - giggidy, lawl
Dressing room scene - giggidy again. Plus, I found the whole concept rather hilarious. At least the clerk couldn't see them. On another note, if I was in Slash's position, I'd probably play it safer and get a one-piece swimsuit for Gardevoir. If I was anyone else, I think I'd notice a Gardevoir in a swimsuit. But then again, this is an imaginary world, and Poke'mon don't exist in real life and....I forgot where I was going with this (damn you ADHD...), but I hope you get the idea. :P And the scene was still hot.
Rooftop scene - That was completely unexpected, teleporting onto the roof. lol. If I was in Slash's postition, I probably would've gone further, but it would depend on how high the building was. If it was a tall shopping center like in Celadon City or Goldenrod City, and it was just a simple roof with no vending machines or shit like that, I would've done it. Hawt though.
Beach - YAAAY BEACH. :D
I liked the touching message throughout the whole thing. If only love were that easy...I alwasy like the parts where you touch base on the aura thingie. Kinda hits close to home cause I have pretty much the same attitude as Slash, though I think I'd desire vengeance to a 'slightly' lesser extent. (aura = dawn/evening, I suppose) ANYWAYS...
Final sex scene - Excellently done, as usual. :) Water sex = win. Visualization was great, too. Nothing like making love in a romantic seaside cove.
And for the Q&A thing at the end (will this be in all the oneshots? I hope so).
1. rofl
2. Oh, it's Costa Rica now? lol
3. AHA! But maybe they secretly teleported the clothes with them and you so kindly forgot to mention it just to you could fuck around with the minds of the Q&A people!
Great job again, dude. This blows the Halloween story out of the water. (literally and figuratively. :P)
I read the e-mail you sent out when you posted this, and I agree, you did tie in dangerously close canonically (is that a word?). But of the most part, the oneshot retained it's own little storyline. I found it interesting that you made so many references to the teasers, though. And the thing with one of the luvdiscs talking to Slash, with part of it being heard as [....] like in the situation with the voice and the Interloper really stuck out at me. (still have no clue who that is, btw. :P)
And now, for points in the story:
Grapefruit comment - giggidy, lawl
Dressing room scene - giggidy again. Plus, I found the whole concept rather hilarious. At least the clerk couldn't see them. On another note, if I was in Slash's position, I'd probably play it safer and get a one-piece swimsuit for Gardevoir. If I was anyone else, I think I'd notice a Gardevoir in a swimsuit. But then again, this is an imaginary world, and Poke'mon don't exist in real life and....I forgot where I was going with this (damn you ADHD...), but I hope you get the idea. :P And the scene was still hot.
Rooftop scene - That was completely unexpected, teleporting onto the roof. lol. If I was in Slash's postition, I probably would've gone further, but it would depend on how high the building was. If it was a tall shopping center like in Celadon City or Goldenrod City, and it was just a simple roof with no vending machines or shit like that, I would've done it. Hawt though.
Beach - YAAAY BEACH. :D
I liked the touching message throughout the whole thing. If only love were that easy...I alwasy like the parts where you touch base on the aura thingie. Kinda hits close to home cause I have pretty much the same attitude as Slash, though I think I'd desire vengeance to a 'slightly' lesser extent. (aura = dawn/evening, I suppose) ANYWAYS...
Final sex scene - Excellently done, as usual. :) Water sex = win. Visualization was great, too. Nothing like making love in a romantic seaside cove.
And for the Q&A thing at the end (will this be in all the oneshots? I hope so).
1. rofl
2. Oh, it's Costa Rica now? lol
3. AHA! But maybe they secretly teleported the clothes with them and you so kindly forgot to mention it just to you could fuck around with the minds of the Q&A people!
Great job again, dude. This blows the Halloween story out of the water. (literally and figuratively. :P)
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February 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
P.S. Now you need to update your story archive on your myspace. :P