rate_review Reviews

Really is one of the best stories I've ever read.

It's a very good story. I liked reading it, but I would make two tiny formatting suggestions.
1. Space out things a bit more. It makes it easier to read.
2. I would have put the different chapters in different chapters instead of one big page. That would make it easier to load and easier to read.

A very lovely fic, I do have to say. It kept me engrossed the whole time and that tends to be hard now-a-days...>.> It was also very interesting to see things from Nagato's perspective more than anyone else's, and I found that really heartening as a lot of people seem to overlook her as a 'spare' of sorts. *ponders*

Now, even though it was enjoyable, it did kinda feel mechanical reading through it. BUT!!! Being that how Nagato Yuki is like she is, it was very much spot on with how she was trying to seek out information she did not know about. I was a little...surprised by Haruhi's reaction, and some of what you wrote down that she said didn't exactly feel like she would have said it like that...*ponders* Then again, it has been a while since I've seen the series and even longer since I've read the books, so~

You also had a few spelling mistakes that even I probably would have overlooked myself if I was writing it. Not anything to worry about. Grammar was very well-written and I could probably say that this is one of the most high-brow adult fics I've read in a long time.

I thoroughly enjoyed it. Hope to see more from you with my favorite series'.

-Narshe Delvar-

I'm glad to see another Nagato fic. Personally I thought it was good, especially how Nagato doesn't seem OOC. Any chance of continuing it?