rate_review Reviews

Great to see you writing again.

I've just had to re-read chapters 1 to 5 to remind myself of the story and will probably start of chapter 6 tomorrow.

Will review chapter 6 as soon as I finish!

good to have you back Iota. great job with chap. 6. impressive tactic of having physcic pokemon shield the other pokemon. it would be quite interseting if the scarry team galactic caught on and nintendo realesed a version of pokemon in which they all really are "bat shit crazy." looking forward to chap. 7

Enjoy the Tea (it's freshly brewed)
a wandering stranger

P.S. it is a great skill to have in life to not get mad over things. not many people can say that without outside "help" (ie: drugs, beer,sex,ect...) thats something to be proud of.

good to see you not down and out. and what you were saying about damp creativity, the same thing happens with me too. anyway since your back.....................................................Let's crack open a few bottles to celebrate!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


Passed out on the floor with a hangover
(by the time you read this review)

doctor thoth

Xain -- Indeed! Thanks!

Ace -- I'm glad you like it so much! I can never get enough criticism, I mean, there's always room to improve :P. The next chapter will be coming up soon.

markman - Thanks!

Cerebrate Fate -- Heh, I'm going to eventually re-write the earlier chapters, I'm going to add more substance and detail, I'd like them to be a bit better :P. As for FF.net, I'm going to publish the story exactly as I post it here :D, if they don't like it, they can take it down!

shadowed death657 -- I'm glad you like it!

Ragdoll -- Heh, I'm still alive! I agree, Iota's new talents are going to be fun to write about as well :P. As for the beta-reader, I'll see what the situation is once I finish Chapter Seven, and hopefully weed out any mistakes myself before I use any beta-reader heh.

Somatose -- Yikes! That's a lot of reading!

a wandering stranger -- I think of Pokemon battle strategy as more like military strategy, where you access any and all resources of your weapons, I try and make them more "Tactical". I WISH nintendo made Pokemon more badass, it's a great concept, just way, WAY too childish. The way I wrote Rorak's philosophy in Chapter Six is quite similar to my own, I usually try not to do things without a definite point to them, and there really is not point in getting angry, so what's the use? And by the way, thank you for the Tea.

doctor thoth -- Nope not dead yet! I plan to contin-- Oh lord, he's passed out and can't hear me.

glad to see your back and love the new update

Welcome back! I must admit, I didn't think we'd hear from you again.

The new chapter is very good. Story's really getting moving now, and the fighting is well written as always. Iota's new talents are going to be quite fun to read about, I imagine.

I think you need a new beta reader, though. I spotted quite a few silly errors that could've been avoided (a they're/there mixup was in there somewhere, I think, which always looks messy), and early out you used the word "Rorak" way too much. I'd be up for the job if you'd like to drop me an email. I can work rather quick if need be.

Well, it seems Iota proved the people talking shit about him wrong. Goodjob Iota.

Sorry, forgot to log in. Anyway i'm going to read your chapter six now Iota. And you are right, i've yet to even see a fucking story on that site. Let alone a good one.

Yay I'm the first to finish reading Chapter 7. Who needs sleep when you have great stories like this. I originally came in the hopes of a poorly written sex romp, but the story line drew me into the point where I almost forgot about it. Almost. I'm a writer myself, but my ability to describe things is lacking. I wrote Krystal's Adventures. It lacks a true story line and it is nothing but a poorly written sex romp, but I also like the critiques for the same reason as you. I guess what I'm trying to say is that your use of imagery is amazing compared to mine. Keep up the good work and I'm looking forward to the next chapter already. I'm hoping to see some yiffing soon, but with the way the story is progressing either something is going to happen in the next chapter or once again the story telling will make me forget about it until the next chapter. Keep up the good work.

Oh and Dark Link Omega and the impending Zerg hoards. -beep- ::Large mushroom cloud:: I guess that takes care of your impatient forces for a little while. Courtesy of SPC. Ace -Death Dealers-, proud leader of the Knights of the Eclipse.

that was so freakin awsome this is the best story ive EVER read