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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Anonymous - Heh, I'm actually going to write it now!
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey, my first review on this website. I want to read more about this story. I hope to see this story turn out to be a lot of character development, and only yiff when it seems appropriet, not just a full out hentai story, but that's just me. You are a very good writer, and I love how well you paint a picture of the setting with your words. I hope to read more of this!
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June 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hey, thanks for reading.
Don't worry, it's not going to be like a porn, as in
"Hey, I like your shoes!"
"Well thanks!"
*Hours of Sex*
End of story.
It's going to develop and continue, with secks of course, but not plaguing every word.
Hope you keep reading :D
Don't worry, it's not going to be like a porn, as in
"Hey, I like your shoes!"
"Well thanks!"
*Hours of Sex*
End of story.
It's going to develop and continue, with secks of course, but not plaguing every word.
Hope you keep reading :D
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ya know, I dont think Slash has reviewed this yet. *checks* Nope. He hasnt reviewed this yet.
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
shadowed death657 - Thanks !
Espy - :o ! That's odd. Noah's a cool name though :). I'd love to read your story when it comes out.
Tai - Cool! I'd love to read that too.
Fate - I've talked with Slash a bit, he hasn't reviewed it, but he has read it. In fact, he beta-read Chapter Five :o.
Espy - :o ! That's odd. Noah's a cool name though :). I'd love to read your story when it comes out.
Tai - Cool! I'd love to read that too.
Fate - I've talked with Slash a bit, he hasn't reviewed it, but he has read it. In fact, he beta-read Chapter Five :o.
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter. I love the way you describe the battle and the plot twist at the end is a brilliant line to end the story on (especially the Conti... bit). You've cut down of grammatical and spelling errors significantly. Keep it up! Can't wait for the next chapter!
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Somatose - Haha, I edited like a beast myself and with the help of some beta readers I tried to eliminate all of those pesky typos. Glad you enjoyed, Chapter 6 will be done soon...I hope.
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
"
Fate - I've talked with Slash a bit, he hasn't reviewed it, but he has read it. In fact, he beta-read Chapter Five :o."
So THATS why it kicked even more ass.
Fate - I've talked with Slash a bit, he hasn't reviewed it, but he has read it. In fact, he beta-read Chapter Five :o."
So THATS why it kicked even more ass.
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Haha, beta readers don't -write- any part of the story, they just weed out mistakes, grammar and typos :P
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June 16, 2008 at 12:00 AM
amazing! wow keep it up... cant wait for next update :)