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June 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
:o Wow, that's quite a review.
I really appreciate people reading my work :P.
I've missed a few spelling a grammatical mistakes as I've edited that chapters, but I'm going to go back and fix them eventually. I've always been retarded when it comes to spelling and grammar. Thank god for spell check.
Anyway, I'm glad you like it, and hope you keep reading.
Thanks.
I really appreciate people reading my work :P.
I've missed a few spelling a grammatical mistakes as I've edited that chapters, but I'm going to go back and fix them eventually. I've always been retarded when it comes to spelling and grammar. Thank god for spell check.
Anyway, I'm glad you like it, and hope you keep reading.
Thanks.
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June 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another fantastic chapter that requires proof reading. The story is absolutely brilliant and well thought out with well-developed characters and great imagery ('to a chilling degree'). The only problem is that at some points, there are grammatical and spelling errors, such as 'start' (which sould be 'stare'), 'word' (which should be 'world') and you've confused youself with whether and weather. Otherwise, an engaging story that flow very well...looking forward to the next chapter...
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June 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
:P Guess I should Proofread some more.
I'll be sure to be more careful in the next chapter
Thanks for the review !
I'll be sure to be more careful in the next chapter
Thanks for the review !
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June 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
"A young black haired trainer with a tough looking female Gardevoir by his side."
Slash? Slash Firestorm? What the fucking hell are you doing over in Sinnoh?
Slash? Slash Firestorm? What the fucking hell are you doing over in Sinnoh?
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June 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hahaha Yes! I was WAITING for someone to notice that!!
I've always had the idea of this story in my head, but I've never written anything before I read Sinners. It inspired me so I thought I'd give Slash a Cameo in Chapter One.
Quite Observant of you!
(Though I don't think Slash has gotten a chance to read this yet.)
I've always had the idea of this story in my head, but I've never written anything before I read Sinners. It inspired me so I thought I'd give Slash a Cameo in Chapter One.
Quite Observant of you!
(Though I don't think Slash has gotten a chance to read this yet.)
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June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter. I like your use of similis and metaphors. Be sure to spell check and proof read since I did find a few grammatical errors and you spelt Shane's name Ahane in one case. Anyway, I like where you're taking this...keep it up!
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June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
:P Whops.
I usually am pretty picky when I proofread my stories, but I got the last few updates out in a hurry, I was leaving the house right as I published one of them.
Anyway, thanks for your support.
I usually am pretty picky when I proofread my stories, but I got the last few updates out in a hurry, I was leaving the house right as I published one of them.
Anyway, thanks for your support.
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June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Just read chapter 3 and it was excellent as expected...hope a lemon comes up quickly and also (for some fun) will you be giving Ariston a human travelling companion (preferably female)?
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June 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Haha, thanks :P
Yeah there will be a female that interacts with Ariston for some time later in the story, and a lemon will be coming up soon...The next chapter is big and I want to make sure it's done right.
Yeah there will be a female that interacts with Ariston for some time later in the story, and a lemon will be coming up soon...The next chapter is big and I want to make sure it's done right.
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June 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
fantastic story...very well written...looking forward to updates