rate_review Reviews

^o^<(Hyuu~!)

Very little to critique on this, hyuu~!
You did a very good job!
The only thing is Tomoyo.
I'm sure by now you know this,
since at the time you wrote this fic,
it may not have gotten to this point,
but she gave up her Dreamseeing powers
to bring the group to Nihon.
Also, Fay is no longer a mage, but
the time-line for this fic allows it,
so I'm not saying you made a mistake with
that. Just Tomoyo. Still. For the purpose
of the fic, it worked really well. I
enjoyed it muchly~! Hyuu~!

Keep writing KuroFay~!

Hyuu~Hyuu~!

Oh. ^.^ I like this. I'd really like to see another chapter. Their reactions when they saw each other again would be... XD priceless.

I'm not saying it couldn't use a good beta-read, though. There was some grammar stuff, but overall it was a nice read. ^.^

Nice! Both of them were really in character. You have no idea how much I LOVE how this explains/accounts for their interaction when Kurogane wakes up - when fai hits kuro with that saucy look on his face (hope that doesn't spoil anything for you - you seem well on top of events, though).
All in all, well done and i hope to read more from you

I loved this story, very well done can't wait until the next chapter. (There will be one right?)