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Is this thing ever gettin updated? I for one really want to see the last part with all the lemony goodness!lol

Attention AFF Readers! This story is awesome! Come review it!

Lol well it's been a while since the last update, and I'm appalled to see no one else reviewed the last chapter. I at least wanted to drop a line to let you know this story is still stuck in my head and I really hope you're still writing more to it!

Another well done to you!
Unfortunately I've never played or watched Tales of Legendia, so afraid the reference was lost on me.
Well now it's suspense time... we all know what's coming but not how it's coming... could be from anywhere or anyone... at anytime! And personally, I think Misty is losing her mind, something's gonna give in there... only a matter of time! With Ash, I want to sneak up behind him and shout "BOO!" and watch as he tries to come down from the ceiling. It would probably be pretty easy to do that to him with his worry and hormones keeping his attention all to themselves.

Once again excellent in the writing department! I don't know where you get your names from, but for a while I was expecting the helicopter pilot to have a two page monologue lol!

Well from what I've read in your comments it would appear we've reached the end of the pre-written part of the story. So I certainly hope you've found your inspiration to continue through with it! I can't wait to find out what happens next!

Hey again!

OK, like a few days later this finally bugs me enough to ask about it. May's Pokemon, Queen Frostine, I read through the chapter picturing a Frosslass and thinking that "Queen Frostine" was the nickname for it. So now I gotta know if if I was right in my assumption or if I'm batting to left field, lol.

Well hope your writing is coming along good and I can't wait for you to post the next part!
Till then, take care!

Doh! You know I read through that part at the Pokecenter... I read the comment at the end where you mentioned May having a glaceon before she did in the series... But for some reason my mind registered that she did own a Glaceon in the story... but that she left it at home... Don't ask me why my thought process went that way... It just somehow strayed I guess.

So OK, I am returning to waiting patiently for the next chapter. I'm trying incredibly hard to ignore your other post "Violated" I've got this thing about reading or watching things out of order, it throws me off... Which as you can see above isn't hard to do lol!

And yeah... I did post the first few chapters of my story up... My writing is definitely not to everyone's tastes as it would appear there are not many yaoi writers in the Pokemon fandom. There are only like 10 other stories there besides mine... So if that's outside your interest scope then don't worry about it, I will still be loyally awaiting the next installment of... (Was about to say Seven Days of Terror but I remember you mentioning you were considering other titles...) Your story!

Till then!

He's the one they call Dr. Feelgood
He's the one that makes ya feel all right
He's the one they call Dr. Feelgood
He's gonna be your Frankenstein

Wow ask and you shall receive, I should have checked back on the story like 2 seconds after my last comment... Haha

Well the latest chapter did not disappoint! Though it would have been nice to see more Pika action during the battle, I really liked the intermingling of multiple scenes and POVs and keeping everything straight and vivid. Brock's Ludicolo had good vibrant depiction, I could really see it dancing around in the rain.

Also it was interesting how you worked Misty back into the story while still leaving enough to mystery. Relationships are budding but ooooh is Ash going to have his hands full with both Misty and May on this trip. Not to mention we have a major confrontation building... Oh and also the dark prelude you threw in there "was it a dream was it a vision?" Oh yeah... there are horrors to come, excellent!

The one gripe I had was that it looked like the formatting messed up in the upload and left the end of the chapter completely italicized. But that's an easy fix around here so no biggie.

I can tell you this story has really made me focus on a pokemon story of my own. I wish onto you the inspiration you've provided for me since especially I for one would like to see this story completed in all the angsty goodness I know is yet to come.

Well good luck to you and I'll be sure and write again later!

It's been a month since the review I left for this story and I have to come clean and say it's been bugging me all month that I want to know what happens next. I haven't been able to get this story out of my head, freaky huh? Well it's a tribute to your creativity and conceptualizing. I just keep playing out scenes in my head. Like I can imagine Misty getting emotional with Ash telling him how can she ever forgive Tracy for taking away the special pokemon that ASH gave her. And then I hope that Ash has enough sentimentality to say something besides he can get her a new pokemon. Maybe something like he gave her the evee so a part of him would always be with her, but now he can come clean and say he wants to be with her himself and doesn't want her to live in remorse over the past. In either case good luck, and I'll be keeping my fingers crossed to see more.

Wow such an interesting story concept. I just sat through the whole story, read the reviews to it... and I have to say I can't understand why there aren't more... The story is well written, there was never a grammatical error that threw me off track while reading. The story has a lot going for it. It's good even if the title is cheesy. Sometimes lacking reviews can be disheartening, I'd tell you not to let it get to you but I'm in the same boat haha. But we still try.

I like the character portrayal so far. Though I have to admit that Ash has come off feeling a little too calloused to me... I mean being a Pokémon trainer himself and also being a little more mature as you'd expect him to be over the years, you would expect him to be a little more sympathetic with Misty. You can tell he feels bad for what's happened, just I would think someone in that position would have tried to do more to comfort the other person. But I suppose there's still plenty of room for that coming up here.

The one thing about the story I wasn't too thrilled about are the Team Rocket chapters. I liked the idea of the prologue giving in the general overview of Team Rocket's plan, but the other two rocket chapters have left me wanting to skim through them to get back to the trainer's drama. I'm sure what's going on there is important for the story to come, but I also feel like I should be surprised by what's been going on here later.

Overall again well done! This is just one of those stories that manages to keep you glued to the screen to find out what is going to happen until the chapters end. Well anyway, I do hope you continue your story, because I would love to finish this one.

Here's hoping it will be soon,
-Revu

Ah and being a swimmer and because I cant find much fault in your writing, I must say that if someone were to inhale water, they would actually sink not float. ; P Otherwise great. Especially the dialogue. i cant wait to read chp. 8 to bridge the gap to "Violated." lol.

oh lol you dont need a whole lot of porn i was just saying. i like the chat. that* is so realistic. 5star.