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ohh continue you pretty pretty pleaseee

It was a good story. I like how you did Ash actually. A sequal would be nice. I'm interested in knowing how this develops.

I'll tell the truth tho, I almost didn't read it based solely on your bestiality warning. Bestiality isn't exactly my cup of tea. Infact, I find it quite disgusting. A key thing tho...if this is supposed to be based on actual knowledge of the male anatomy, then it was really silly to put in Onix of all pokemon... if a creature made of rock ever actually did something like that, esp a creature as large as an Onix, a teenage male(any normal human for that matter) would have most likely been killed, or at the very least been crippled. Try and be a bit more logical and sensible if yr actually looking to be accurate. I'd strongly recommend in sequals you steer away from bestiality in general, and opt for a big vibrator, cock rings, and various other sex toys and what not to further your S/M theme. You can leave the Pokemon(onix in this case) there for Brock to use as empty threats, but I strongly suggest nothing more then that.

I liked it. A lot.

that was a fun read XD! Hope to see another at one point.

This is the first Pokemon fanfic I have ever read and I think you did a good job with it. Wow... Onix... *whistles* That was pretty harsh. Ah, well, I'd like to see what happens anyway. By the way, I LOVE Brock.

fine then ur a sick bastard and i love u 4 it lol. I 4 1 would like 2 know what happens the day (and night) after... the only thing bad i have 2 say is... y onix??? that almost sounds impossible when u compare size. i think u could have used a diffrent pokemon there, but thats it. other wise, good job! (yes i know im sick too lol)

yes post another one you may be sick
but its more interesting than some ive read

Ah! Your story is great! It really got my engines revved up, if you catch my drift! Pleas write more, it's quite an interesting premise.

The part with the Onix was pretty sick O__o but as long as Ash gets raped it's all fine by me MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAA!!

I'm always interested in reading more unusual works and this was the only one in the gay section that caught my attention.
I hadnt realised it would be so violent when I entered but at least it can be said that you're writing style is good. I got mixed enjoyment from it cause while I dont think anybody deserves that level of treatment ash does deserve a good hard fuck in my mind for the self rightious attitude he has in much of the western series.