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January 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hey ^_^
I am LOVING this story.The plot is wonderful, really dark and twisted and the characterization of Eriol and Syaoran is spot on. Havn't read much fanfiction or wrote it in a LONG time and this story is making me want to start it up aain!
I hope you keep at this wonderful story, and look forward to reading more!
Luvs,
XXROXYXX
I am LOVING this story.The plot is wonderful, really dark and twisted and the characterization of Eriol and Syaoran is spot on. Havn't read much fanfiction or wrote it in a LONG time and this story is making me want to start it up aain!
I hope you keep at this wonderful story, and look forward to reading more!
Luvs,
XXROXYXX
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September 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Okay so, now for my super special awesome review...(I hope XD) of what I have read so far, and then your new chapter
SOme of this I've already told you, but I'll go ahead and repeat it.
I LOVE the way you have converted and RP into a story, I would never be able to guess that this was once and RP if you hadn't stated ahead of time that it was. Also, I LOVE how you have captured the characters without making them horribly ooc (like some people do). Syaoran (to me) seems like a hard character to portray, because he's such a huge combination of teenage angst, anger, intelligence, and apethetic..ness. You, however, have captured him excellently. I love how recluctant he is in having to go train with Eriol, and then how confused he feels inwardly towards his feelings for Sakura and for Eriol. I especially liked it when he said that he wasn't sure if what he was feeling for Eriol was like what he felt for Sakura, because as this story pogresses, it's obvious that those feeling are going to begin to become extremely muddled and questionable.
FOr Eriol, I love how you've captured him. He's got that whole, "Oh, I'm so wise, yet I like to take that wisdom and use it to be a little mischeivious"...type thing...<__< but he doesn't PUSH it, ya know? I'll be honest, I never really got to see the end of CCS, and when I watched as much as I did, it was a long time ago, but I could always remember that I really liked Eriol...because he was so.....Eriolish.......and I think you have captured that well.
As for Spinel and Nakuru, I would like to say that I love how you have worked them both into the story as the minor, yet helpful characters they were in the anime.
OH OH! I just remembered something important I wanted to thank you on.
I find often whenever I read fanfics, the author has this OBNOXIOUS habit of using little Japanese phrases for every other word, and dear lord, it IRRITATES me like no ones business. You, however, have been AWESOME in not trying to be one of the Japanese wannabes. Any Japanese of Chinese words you HAVE used have been very practical and wisely divided up within the story. I just wanna thank you or that, cause honestly, stuff like that will ruin a story for me. If you're not Japanaese, you should try to be. <__<;
Okay, and the firs love scene was perfectly placed in my opinion as well, it wasn't too soon, and it wasn't too late, and the buildup was SEXY AS HELL....I love it when they DRAW the lovings out as opposed to just DOING it....
OKAY NOW FOR THE NEW CHAPTER!! *dramatic music*
I loved Syaoran asking Spinel for advice on his love life XD I mean, it was cute to me, cause poor Syaoran is so confused and he thinks Eriol doesn't care for him and....*rolls in the angst* and again, you have those conflicting emotions towards Sakura confusing him even further. Plus, I love Eriol's emotions in this chapter. He almost seems fornlorn.
and OMG anger and contraversy XD I LOVE it when they get angry. And when Eriol was all, telling Nakuru to go without him and he was all, "Syaoran is staying here" I just imagined him with that, you know, stern and cold tone of voice that would just send a shiver down your spine.
and then after their argument, I could almost fill Eirol's pain in the fact that he had to push Syaoran away...;__; I was, like, "NOO ERIOL!! Go after him and LOVE him!!"
so, anyway...MOAR WOMEN!! *shakes fist*
SOme of this I've already told you, but I'll go ahead and repeat it.
I LOVE the way you have converted and RP into a story, I would never be able to guess that this was once and RP if you hadn't stated ahead of time that it was. Also, I LOVE how you have captured the characters without making them horribly ooc (like some people do). Syaoran (to me) seems like a hard character to portray, because he's such a huge combination of teenage angst, anger, intelligence, and apethetic..ness. You, however, have captured him excellently. I love how recluctant he is in having to go train with Eriol, and then how confused he feels inwardly towards his feelings for Sakura and for Eriol. I especially liked it when he said that he wasn't sure if what he was feeling for Eriol was like what he felt for Sakura, because as this story pogresses, it's obvious that those feeling are going to begin to become extremely muddled and questionable.
FOr Eriol, I love how you've captured him. He's got that whole, "Oh, I'm so wise, yet I like to take that wisdom and use it to be a little mischeivious"...type thing...<__< but he doesn't PUSH it, ya know? I'll be honest, I never really got to see the end of CCS, and when I watched as much as I did, it was a long time ago, but I could always remember that I really liked Eriol...because he was so.....Eriolish.......and I think you have captured that well.
As for Spinel and Nakuru, I would like to say that I love how you have worked them both into the story as the minor, yet helpful characters they were in the anime.
OH OH! I just remembered something important I wanted to thank you on.
I find often whenever I read fanfics, the author has this OBNOXIOUS habit of using little Japanese phrases for every other word, and dear lord, it IRRITATES me like no ones business. You, however, have been AWESOME in not trying to be one of the Japanese wannabes. Any Japanese of Chinese words you HAVE used have been very practical and wisely divided up within the story. I just wanna thank you or that, cause honestly, stuff like that will ruin a story for me. If you're not Japanaese, you should try to be. <__<;
Okay, and the firs love scene was perfectly placed in my opinion as well, it wasn't too soon, and it wasn't too late, and the buildup was SEXY AS HELL....I love it when they DRAW the lovings out as opposed to just DOING it....
OKAY NOW FOR THE NEW CHAPTER!! *dramatic music*
I loved Syaoran asking Spinel for advice on his love life XD I mean, it was cute to me, cause poor Syaoran is so confused and he thinks Eriol doesn't care for him and....*rolls in the angst* and again, you have those conflicting emotions towards Sakura confusing him even further. Plus, I love Eriol's emotions in this chapter. He almost seems fornlorn.
and OMG anger and contraversy XD I LOVE it when they get angry. And when Eriol was all, telling Nakuru to go without him and he was all, "Syaoran is staying here" I just imagined him with that, you know, stern and cold tone of voice that would just send a shiver down your spine.
and then after their argument, I could almost fill Eirol's pain in the fact that he had to push Syaoran away...;__; I was, like, "NOO ERIOL!! Go after him and LOVE him!!"
so, anyway...MOAR WOMEN!! *shakes fist*
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September 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
to continue where I left off:
Eriol is being prtrayed very well. His emotional conflicts are awesomely dipicted as being a conflict against Syaoran's own. It's almost like two sides of the same coin...And I loved the love scene. The buildup was FANFRIKENTASTIC.....And I want to compliment you on one particular thing, and that's how you didn't overload us with Japanese or chinese phrases!! GOD DAMNIT I HATE IT WHEN PEOPLE DO THAT! I feel like, yeah sure, a couple is fine, but if you use them every other word, it's just retarded. And you used them AWESOMELY. two thumbs up for that. And I like how you have woked in Spinel and Nakuru as minor supporting characters. I know it must be had to work characters such like that in, but you did it extremely well.
As for the new chapter, I have to say, I hate that you left me on an angsty bit like that!! ;__; *kicks you* I love how Syaoan is dealing with his love/crush fo both Eriol, and his dedication to Sakura. Especially when he described how he thinks both of them feel for him. And Eriol, I feel soo bad for him, cause he WANTS to be with Syaoran, but he thinks he can't because it isn't 'in the cards' (haha, get the joke?) And I LOVED the angsty argument....I swear, though, I wanted Eriol to just grab Syaoran and throw him over his shoulder and take him to his bed and just SCREW HIM!! O__O XD lol, maybe not really.....but man, I was really feeling for them both ;___; they want to be together damnit!!!
.....I DEMAND MOAR WOMAN!!!
Eriol is being prtrayed very well. His emotional conflicts are awesomely dipicted as being a conflict against Syaoran's own. It's almost like two sides of the same coin...And I loved the love scene. The buildup was FANFRIKENTASTIC.....And I want to compliment you on one particular thing, and that's how you didn't overload us with Japanese or chinese phrases!! GOD DAMNIT I HATE IT WHEN PEOPLE DO THAT! I feel like, yeah sure, a couple is fine, but if you use them every other word, it's just retarded. And you used them AWESOMELY. two thumbs up for that. And I like how you have woked in Spinel and Nakuru as minor supporting characters. I know it must be had to work characters such like that in, but you did it extremely well.
As for the new chapter, I have to say, I hate that you left me on an angsty bit like that!! ;__; *kicks you* I love how Syaoan is dealing with his love/crush fo both Eriol, and his dedication to Sakura. Especially when he described how he thinks both of them feel for him. And Eriol, I feel soo bad for him, cause he WANTS to be with Syaoran, but he thinks he can't because it isn't 'in the cards' (haha, get the joke?) And I LOVED the angsty argument....I swear, though, I wanted Eriol to just grab Syaoran and throw him over his shoulder and take him to his bed and just SCREW HIM!! O__O XD lol, maybe not really.....but man, I was really feeling for them both ;___; they want to be together damnit!!!
.....I DEMAND MOAR WOMAN!!!