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March 29, 2010 at 12:00 AM
An interesting and not at all unappealing concept. The only critique I have is the mention of "a slice of pomegranate" placed on a plate. Pomegranates are not sliced, it's just not that kind of fruit(since they're made primarily of juice seeds not fruit flesh). The mention just really bothered me....Overall, an interesting and engaging piece of fanfiction, thank you for sharing.