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February 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
The story moves well, the tone fits the character's styles, and over all it's already one of the better pieces of written fanfiction. The character descriptions are a bit to literal, and in depth. They are too memorable, and take away from the focus of the story, though this being AdultFanfiction, we can let appearances be more important than in that of mundane pros. The little relationships between pokemon are quite sweet, and add much of the smile and reality factor to the story. I like it. Update it soon. Cliffhangers are like the blissful embrace of... awww screw it you know we all hate you for that delicious cliffhanger.