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Hehehe, I quite enjoyed that chapter. one thing though... I notice that you tend to spell "through" as "threw". Threw is like the past tense of "throw"... so that kept on appearing as an simple yet glaring error to me.

you know something? If Light didn't want to tell him the truth yet about how he knew L's name, he could try to pass it off as an stupid dream he had if he wanted to go down that weird, lame implausible route. I had that thought for some reason when I was figuring out how Light would try to explain it without telling the truth. I even had this little scenario play itself out in my head...
Light would look apologetic, and explain the reason why he had tried to play dumb too as well. He'd say: "About how I knew your name... to be honest, I don't quite know. At least not able to explain it rationally... Hell, it even sounds crazy when I think about it. You see... I had this strange dream with you in it. I don't exactly remember all of the details, but it was how I learned your name. I honestly thought it was only a dream that meant nothing at the time, and that's why I acted like it was nothing."
It'd be like an half-truth, since how he DID have an dream with Zaki who happened to look like L. And if L pressed for details about the dream, he could always describe Zaki and the rescue he had to do... while of course omitting the rest of the more important details, inducing who zaki is, etc. :P

Of course the question is whenever L would believe it or not. My money's on L basically doubting that little story, but giving Light the befit of doubt by filing it away into one of the possible ways that Light could had gotten his name.

but of course you don't have to listen to me, I'm just being stupid...

Hehe, you now it kind of evil to stop when it so exciting so you almost fall of your chair :P I have no idea what possibly could happen next since you're totally unpredictable, and that a good thing. Um I got the feeling that it was some kind of torturechamber or interrogation room they where heading towards. You said it was gonna be a fight so thats for sertain. Anyway I hope Ryuzaki calms down and dont do anything he will regret later :)It would be cute if he also would find some feelings for Raito.
I'm also having a cold...I know how you feel. Please get healty and continiue to write (can't wait) ^w^

loving this so far. keep up the good work! ^^

AAHHHH! No a chiffy....But other than that I really love this story. I just love the way your going about the whole thing, so different. But anyways I loved this chapter it was short but thats ok it was more like a filler chapter anyway. So yeah, But I hope you get to filling better.

I'm totally digging the story so far. ^_^

:) Thank you for all the nice words you said about me. That, and that I saw that you did put out a new chapter made my day a lot better. Thank you so much. As usual your story's totally unpredicable and I totally love that. I liked your new character Zaki too and that Raito killed his darker self, I didn't saw that comming :) You have an amazing abillity to keep the characters in-character and it feels really true. Even if Raito is different from what he is in the manga he feels true too. You really are an amazing person to have such great imagination. I'm really looknig forward to the next chapter, I'll be waiting :)

See what you did? You actually got me off my lazy rear and made me finally register with the site. You have single handedly restored my belief that there are good fan fiction writers out there. I have to admit I've heard of similar plots before but they just never seem to give the second chance idea any justice (pardon my lame pun) The fight between Raito and Kira was wonderful, I was hoping you'd do some sort of run in between the two. And the idea of Raito having to absorb the defeated Kira was a great touch, I interpret the absorbing as Raito accepting his past plus previous identity and beginning on the road to redemption ... correct? If not you may hit me for stupidity.

Oh my god ... It's happened ... A story has finally come along in all my years on this site that's made me actually hit the review button. I can't find words to describe my thoughts so far but I can say this, DON'T STOP!!! From just these few chapters I can tell this is going to be a story that will redefine my standards of what a great, original story is. I've heard of the idea of Life Note before but this is the only story I've found where it has potential. I wish I could still write like this ... for the sake of all uninspired artists and those who have given up on their creativity entirely PLEASE FINISH THIS STORY.

Absolutely lovely! It is a whole new look on the second chance thing, and so very very interesting! I am very eager to read more, to see what Light will do, what will happen.

OMG! I Love It, Yay I'm so excited to read the next chapter. I can't wait. I think Mikami should be the new kira your right he is the best for it, complete wacko. Also I don't like misa at all so maybe you should have her join the new kira just to make things interesting. but it's whatever you want either way I think this story is gonna be great...