rate_review Reviews

This is honest to go the best L/Raito fic I have ever read. EVER. It has substance, a plot, lemon-line and smutty goodness and it is detailed!

I give it a 232313464349536949325463249753467023/10 ^^

Update and keep writing!

BTW if you need a beta, feel free to ask me, dont worry about deadlines or nothing as you worried about in A/N's cause I have to worry about my own stories before Ipester you about yours lol.

Anyway.

Thanks for posting!

-NightmareishRain

Yay, update!
I love this story, have I mentioned that lately?
Cuz it's completely true.

Haha it's so humorously hectic, I can't wait to see what happens next!
I love that you always have the ability to leave the reader wanting more, it never gets dull or boring.
Keep it up!
:D

whoo! I realy like this story, and I hope there will be another chapter at some point

good story; period

most stories has light being either:

bastard
bi-polar (even without the intent) or a schzo
Completly OOC!

But this story doesn't really do either; my favorite part so far is the battle in his inner psyche and how he 'kills' kira. Besides random spelling error (which I don't care about fyi!) and uh something that I don't want to think about it's still one of the 'good' long stories on this site (so far I only found about around five to ten really good long stories, one of them being memento mori, the other which I cannot think of the title, but it's Au and has Raito being an art director...or what not, as well as the other one which I cannot think of with a completly different ending to series on and L dealing with a Kira Raito and tons of smexing.)

Meh this is longer than I thought....still sometimes I wish there was more smex scenes in this story since that one that you made was good. If you can make a sequel; preggy L or Raito is always lol worthy.

Keep up the good job.

Oh zut, and here I was thinking that Misa wouldn't show her ugly, little face around this great story. Oh well, good job and please update soon!

I know this is late, but I'm so sorry about your sister! I'm very happy she's okay! Your story is progressing very nicely. I was checking everyday to see an update, believe me, lol. I get geekily excited. Can't wait for the next chapter. :D

Misa will end up working with Mikami. I just know it! :P
I'm curious to how he wound up thinking L was the first Kira, lol. But I suppose in a way it sorta makes sense... L would probably make a very good Kira. kind of a frightening thought lol.

I'm going to read it and then review again....and probably again >< it seems good though!

hi
i´ve began to read your story and its really good
just for you to know.. bored means gelangweilt / langweilig in german..
for better understanding..
gelangweilt:
someone is bored.
langweilig:
this lesson is so boring.
definitely not gebohrt ^^ that word would equal drilled.
Lu´s Angel

Hi! I've read all of the story and decided to review. You have a wonderful plot going, and you keep as close to the anime as possible I've noticed, which is hard to do when taking a fanfic in the direction you have. Go you! The only flaw I've seen in this story is the grammar, a few misplaced words. It's expected that L and Raito would be OOC when taking DeathNote in this direction, so it reallt can't be held against you. After the first few chapeters you managed to keep them closer to their original characters, and you seem to be getting better at it. Again, go you! I can't wait to read the rest of the story. Also, I'd like to offer to be your beta if you don't already have one. This story can only improve with a few changes and perhaps some help with OOC speech in the first chapters. Feel free to let me know via PM.

Have a nice day!