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I’ve really have no wish to repeat it. It seems that the less darkness that is inside the more I’ll feel…maybe if I go farther I’ll get my memories back.’
That sentence is gibberish.
Furthermore THEN is an adverb indicating consequential action, THAN is a COMPARATIVE adverb, which comes after comparative adjectives and adverbial constructions such as more, smarter and more accurate.
Story has an interesting premise.

The grammatical errors and ooc patterns of speech for a genius such as Yagami Raito are too irritating, and so I will not finish this story despite it's interesting premise.

I love it. I love the depth to the story, the characters, the feeling of losing myself in this story, and _being_ there... I love it.
I especially love the romance, the passion, that doesn't cross the line. Anticipation makes it all the sweeter, that they aren't stepping over that invisible line, so that when they do, it'll be all the more satisfying. And I loved the scene with Raito having to explain that it 'wasn't that he was unhappy, but, L, your hard-on was poking me in the back of the head.' *giggles maniacally*
And, ah, although funny and good for a long laugh... you have a bit of an eye-popping typo in chapter 8... Now, I got wrapped up in the story and didn't read the various author's notes, so I don't know if this has been pointed out to you or not, but...
When Watari entered the White Room? I know you meant he looked into the retina scanner that scans his eyes... but you wrote rectal. *snickers* And, I'm sorry, but that gave me such _bad_ mental images, followed with the line, 'he straight when the scan finished and dug out a small silver key.' Something along those lines, and... I just had to mention it, it took me a good ten minutes to stop laughing at the influx of images coming into my head... which end of his body was facing the door and which end did Raito actually have to look at? *grins*
I can't wait to see more!
~IS

I'm really enjoying the story! Please post soon!

Ack!
What a cliffhanger!
I want to know how L reacts when he sees Raito in his shinigami form...
That's what'll happen, right?
Gosh, I love this story...
Love love love love love!

I'm so happy! I'm so happy! I'm so happy! I promise I did my happy dance when I saw that you updated X3. I,ve read a lot of fan fics lately, but I can honestly tell that your's is the best on the entire internet. I get so worked up over this so now I'm not going to be able to sleep (clock's 00.30 in Sweden) But that's okay, I feel so happy at the moment, I thougt that you had put this story on ice for awile untill you had motivation again. :) Don't worry I will never abandon this wonderful story, I might watch this 'detective Conan' too so I can enjoy your other story too :) I'll do it as soon I get time for it :) And do I need to tell you that I liked this chaper? (love all the chapters, hihi)

I bet he's going to show L his other form. obvious! :p

I don't mind the fact that they were a little OOC. Light's changed a lot in a way anyway... so in a way that makes sense.

hmmm. looking forward to the next chapter.

Aww, I can't wait for next chapter! I know updates can take a while, but I still feel obliged to say it, please update soon!! I truly love this story and was so happy to an update today. I also can't wait to see L's reaction to Raito's "true form." Hope you have a happy holidays!

It was great! I knew there had to be a reason why i kept checking on this story today! Lol, even if it's short it's made my day! (again ^_^) You're really good at writing! I really don't want to wait for the next update... but, i will... lol, there's nothing else i can do besides hope and pray you'll update again soon. Good luck and thank you for updating!

Yay! Another Chapter it feels like I've been waiting forever.... But Anyways Good Chapter kinda short but thats ok.... It's like getting a taste of what's to come or something but can't wait for the next chapter... We all know what Raito's gonna do... so yeah can't wait....