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September 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm liking your story! I'm not really a Matt/Near (Near/Matt) fan, but the summary of the story caught my attention. So, I figured it wouldn't hurt to give it a try. I'm loving how Matt is acting, along with Near. I can't wait to see what takes place in the next chapter.
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September 18, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think you should put this story on Fanfiction.net too. Anyway, this chapter was slightly confusing, especially considering that someone put on Wikipedia that L's first name is Benjamin. Benjamin? Of all names!
When I think of the name Benjamin, I imagine our founding father in a french brothel, flirting with a whore who is soon to bear one of his many, many illegitimate children. Sorry, I'm not a big fan of Franklin.
And I've read on the internet that his real name was Lawrence Lawliet too; I know that it is fake, and so is this Benjamin thing. They wouldn't call him L Lawliet if his first name didn't start with an L, so Lawrence is more believable. Someone might be trying to make fun of him, a crime which should be punishable by a thousand deaths.
Anyway, the chapter was interesting, but I honestly don't think you will get many reviews when the first two chapters are void of all romance. I think the majority of readers were looking for hard core yaoi when they clicked on this. But it's just my take on how they think.
Will read the next installment when you post. Byes.
When I think of the name Benjamin, I imagine our founding father in a french brothel, flirting with a whore who is soon to bear one of his many, many illegitimate children. Sorry, I'm not a big fan of Franklin.
And I've read on the internet that his real name was Lawrence Lawliet too; I know that it is fake, and so is this Benjamin thing. They wouldn't call him L Lawliet if his first name didn't start with an L, so Lawrence is more believable. Someone might be trying to make fun of him, a crime which should be punishable by a thousand deaths.
Anyway, the chapter was interesting, but I honestly don't think you will get many reviews when the first two chapters are void of all romance. I think the majority of readers were looking for hard core yaoi when they clicked on this. But it's just my take on how they think.
Will read the next installment when you post. Byes.
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September 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Good job. This chapter is well written. Too bad there was no Matt/Near loving in here. But I will look forward to the next installment of this story, as it seems interesting enough. I'm very curious as to where Matt is taking Near and why. And by what means Matt's soul was allowed to take a pilgrimage to Earth from where ever he came from, be it Heaven, Hell, or purgatory.
There's always the possibility that it's just someone who closely resembles him though. I prefer a supernatural explaination because it makes it cooler.
I originally imagined that he would be taking him to a spirit world of some kind, and there they would meet all the other characters that died in the series, hopefully L and Mello are among them. Anyway, I was slightly annoyed at all the action and lack of romance, but it is easy to overlook; I can see very interesting things are going to happen later on.
Happy Writing.
There's always the possibility that it's just someone who closely resembles him though. I prefer a supernatural explaination because it makes it cooler.
I originally imagined that he would be taking him to a spirit world of some kind, and there they would meet all the other characters that died in the series, hopefully L and Mello are among them. Anyway, I was slightly annoyed at all the action and lack of romance, but it is easy to overlook; I can see very interesting things are going to happen later on.
Happy Writing.