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Oh I wish I could see the look on Giovanni's face when he finds out that the Pokemon League has turned on the shadow, light, impath masters. Although the League did not want her specifically, it would be only be a matter of time before. This may have been the biggest mistake that the League made. Without Ash, Valdrade, and Anabel fighting with them, the League forces will be all too easy to destroy now that Giovanni and Cyrus's forces have teamed up. Ash's strength alone isn't what holds the League force focuses, but his charisma, attitude, and he just has this unearthly way about him that can command the loyalty from people around him (not like like geass of course ^_^). So, what shall our favorite trio do now since they are now dubbed "enemies of the world"? Will they seclude themselves and train or did you have something else in mind for them? I await the update and as always, til' next time!
Sincerely,
~Akewataru~

Oh boy I can't wait til' you continue!! You'd better not kill off Giovanni, he's one of the coolest villians and you can write him to be so many ways. I could see Cyrus, Mars, Saturn, Jupiter, and maybe Pluto(scientist) joining up since they seem to be the most organized group, next to Team Rocket. I could definitely see the League using what Ash did at the black pyramid against him saying that he is mentally unstable, and has no regard for friend or foe. Til' next time.
One of your beloved readers,
~Akewataru~

Interesting that Lance is making Ash head of his own group once again. Also, who better than the League to put down sanctions. Who would dare defy them? (Except Lance of course) However Giovanni or someone has to be controlling them with holding somebody hostage, blackmail, or something that he can hold over their head if they don't comply. Other than this, i don't have much to say, but good luck running with the idea. Til next time!
Sincerely,
~Akewataru~

I think the reason why you are running out of ideas is because in your story there hasn't been an falling action. Everything is coming out too perfect for the heros. Take this for an example: In the second season of the anime Code Geass, the masked hero Zero finally gets discovered for who he really is and everyone who he thought was his ally turns against him and pursue him. However, what is key is that the Black Knights, the army that Zero previously lead, wouldn't have gotten anywhere without him in the first place so he is able to stay one step a ahead them. Just a thought, maybe Giovanni or someone within Pokemon League could raise some doubts about why the shadow and light elements are needed. "They are too powerful compared to the other Pokemon types to exist." Could be a claim. Make Ash, Valdrade, and Anabel public enemy #1. However, keep a few of the League members secretly on his side. Obviously, Lance (cause' he's such a rebel), but who else is up to you. Think about this. Til' next time, because I definitely want to see what you do.
Sincerely
Akewataru

Whoa, I did not see that coming for Misty, but good thinking nontheless. Sorry, I misunderstood the question. I guess like I said before, since you are using Paul, you should be using Ash's generation IV Pokemon such as Staraptor, Tortera, Infernape (let's assume he evolved and got control of his blaze to spite Paul. Seems likely, yes?) Floatzel, and Gliscor (I can see s/he becoming more vampiric once merged with shadow). Maybe Bulbasaur if it evolves, did you use Tyrannitar yet? I could see s/he coming back to Ash if her/his mother was killed by Team Rocket. Til' next time!
Sincerely,
Akewataru

So, even Paul has Dark type powers...I like the shadow master's punishment for Misty. I'm surprised that you didn't go into further details, if you know what I mean. Characters to add to Ash's team, hmm...I would try using the Frontier Brains, and the Elite Four and Gym Leaders from the Hoenn and Sinnoh that you haven't used yet. Since you've included Paul a fourth generation character, you definitely need to include the elite four from Sinnoh: Aaron (Bug), Flint (Fire), Bertha (Ground, on an additional note Bertha might be Agatha's younger sister. Check their names in English and Japanese, and their pictures, they are just alike!), Lucian (Psychic), and Cynthia (the Champion that uses various types.) If you need info about them individually, Bulbapedia is you one stop shop. Til' next time!
Sincerely,
~Akewataru~

Nice touch letting Ash catch the same Aerodactyl that would have made him its breakfast after such a long nap. Let me see if I have this right: Dark can take out Psychic, however Light can take out Dark? It sort of makes sense, however doesn't the Light element have psychic abilities? Wouldn't Dark have some effectiveness against light? Also, which has effectiveness over the other: shadow or light? Or is it like the Dragon type where it is super-effective against each another. This is only theory, because I highly doubt shadow could attack light since they are one and the same and doing that would be attacking itself

Thanks again. So, there will be a part two to this battle with Misty, I'm glad. By the way, are you making it that Misty is becoming mentally unstable? Also, thank you for giving me some hinting of what the situation is with Lance and Claire. Now, what I am really interested in seeing is how Giovanni plans to get rid of Anabel. Til' next time.
Sincerely,
~Akewataru~

I guess that's the power of steel influencing Paul. Here's some food for thought: You should give Misty the ability to be able look into water to see what she wants. Sort of like a magic mirror, but with limits, like she can only see what water somewhere else is reflecting. That may seem like too much power, but water is a special element. The amount on the earth is finite (although a large amount indeed) but indestructable. Rather, no more is being made and none of it is being destroyed. The only way I can see to "destroy" water is to break or decompose it into Oxygen and Hydrogen, however this requires a great deal of energy heat or electricity (237.13 kJ). There are several things you could use here, the first and last thoughts being something I plan to use in the future. Update soon! Keep your muses talking!

~Akewataru~

Wow, you really used my idea well, I'm quite flattered. I'm glad we are starting to hear the voices of the characters in the story. Not that Ash, Valdrade, and Anabel aren't coolest, but there are other people in the world. Lance and Claire being cousins only by marriage? Are you going to elaborate on this or not? Oh, I forgot to mention for last chapter that giving Brock a girl was a good idea. He needs lovin' too. Lucy was really one of the few girls in the anime to actually have a crush on Brock. This chapter coming up I think I'm going to really like. However, one has to wonder though, how hard of a time is Ash going to have defeating Misty? Til' tomorrow.
Sincerely,
~Akewataru~