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!! That was so totally mazing!!! You should make a sequel about when they get to ryuzakis house and what Sayus reaction is when Raito finally gets home sometime late morning lol!! Or afternoon XD if ya know what I mean ;)

Um, drool?

Sequel and trilogy please?

I like submissive Raito.

Seriously, you portray their characters better than anyone I've ever had the pleasure of being able to read ones fanfictions.

Thank you!

-NightmareishRain

Well this is a late review but I bow to you. You did a great job for a first lemon. Can't go back to hetero so easily, eh? I have to admit it was creepy how much Sayu knew about Raito's lack-thereof sex life, but it was cute. I saw myself in her :) And L... wow, I would love to see him smile and hear him laugh... I think a lot of us would. I think you need to continue on with this story, taking them to mansion with the lubes... add in silk restraints... some candle-wax play... Okay calm down, woman! *fans self* I'm glad you had fun writing this lemon and I hope you do continue writing them. Even though there were some spelling and grammatical errors don't sell yourself too short.

OMG!! I totally love your work! Keep it up! lol no pun intended...^_^

wow....that was really good. You should make it into a multichap story or add a sequel.

Hmm not half bad for a first attempt ya just need a little practice

Haha you're a genius! You involved the death note and the shinigami so brilliantly. Sayu was so cute, aww :) I don't mind if Raito is OOC or if anybody is for the matter. If Raito had been i character he probably would have been totally impossible, and that wouln't have been any fun at all. I think I will like anything you will make. I like when it isn't a lemon part too quick in the story, in some fics theres a lemon almost emediatly but I like it like you do it. It's more fun when you add a story to it :) This story was funny too, you had me laughing a couple of times ^w^ I liked the lemon too but it fellt a bit rushed at some points. Anyway for your first lemon it was great and you should make another chapter for this :) You are an awesome person!

This was a very good one-shot. ^_^. Do not worry about length. Most fanfic fans LOVE long chapters such as this. The lemon, by the way, was quite good. XD. You should definitely make a sequel.

I can't wait to see what happens next.