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Well well well. Looks like I found myself a new fic to read. *Story crits me for 10k damage, I faint* I hereby confer upon you the official Cerebrate Fate Seal of Approval™ Any and all readers will now obey you without question. You may now also use the HM Move "Edit" outside of battle. And take this! My favorite TM: Paper Cannon!

The story is great! I'm really enjoying it.
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Hey Kitten. Don't worry, I'm still here and reading. ^_^; I was gone for a bit but I'm up to speed now. I must say you drew me right back in with that chapter nine. XD What can I say. It happened a little sooner and more sudden than I expected, but I am not complaining. >D It was a little weird to see Angel act like... well, not so much a virgin. I know she probably implicitly trusts Gary, but the act, feelings and willingness came more natural to her than her supposed lack of sexual experience would suggest. Nice work on the chapter length, though. *winks* I know you'd like to hear that. ^_^ The Misty chapter was interesting enough and has me interested to see why the clash of two Psychic attacks caused a Poliwrath to explode as if someone shoved a grenade down his throat. XD

*waiting for the Scanner to go over 9000*

.........that was.......all kinds of messed up. I do hope that poor pokemon isn't dead. >_>

Yup, the story is still entertaining and, now, all kinds of mysterious and ten kinds of dramatic. Glad to have you as friend on MSN! And, you no cry! When you get to reading as many fanfics as i do, you start to see similarities everywhere.

*sha-shays back in, reading happily along, then faints at chapter nine.*

Hot diggity-damn with a side of Spam! That was far earlier then i expected it to be. Plus, it reminds me of the hunt......i mean a few other stories i've recently read. Chapters still short as holiday-hell at times, but i've rarely been bothered by length, more or less. I love the battles, love the romance, and mainly love how a story about one of 100 of the video games Lass's actually has a working fic! Thanks for making this excellent story!

Ok number 1, im super happy you picked Johto Gary. Oh man he used to be so annoying. Yea im not the biggest Gary fan in the world but I like this one.

One thing I kinda didn’t like was the fact that a little eevee (no matter how strong) could really do so much damage on an onix with bite (but I guess if any other little starter pokemon can do it so can eevee). But the sand attack idea was good. I also like the little snuggle moment with Gary at the end, very cute.

I like the choice of umbreon for the evolution of eevee. A shiny umbreon is one good looking shiny. (Poor Flairon, brown. Why oh why brown? Not even a nice brown.) Anyway you should update soon. Im really starting to get into your story. I’ll be waiting.

Ps: out nerd me? Not many can do that. As for nerdy things I would like to point that why would sand attack affect an Onix while sandstorm will not... weird!

Now now, don't be so harsh on yourself. I liked chapter seven as there is nothing wrong with some deepening of the plot. Things need to be explained and you mixed it with the characters till being on the move which prevented it from ending up as a static scene.

As for six... I think there was a little too much numbers in there. Maybe you'd do well to describe the battle scenes in a slightly more abstract way, as it's impossible to see with the naked eye how many HP a Pokémon is losing, it's just a number, a statistic used in the games to represent their status. I appreciate how you're basing the fight scenes on the laws of the game instead of the anime, (at least you won't "use thunder as armor") but the scenes would gain a lot more tension if the status isn't so crystal clear and mathematical.

I was surprised that suddenly everyone was falling all over Angel, even Gary. It kinda came falling from the sky as you had not mentioned before how much of a treat to the male eye she supposedly is. It makes me wonder why she wasn't getting more attention in Pallet, as well. How does that work? ^_^;

Now, I saw your little review on my one chapter I once dropped here. >] *grins* What kind of surprise are we talking about, here?

*reading happily along until -chapter- 6 makes him anime fall* Jeeez......*rubbing his sore head* You could have warned a guy. This is a great story and i was enjoying myself and everything, even without the, near pre-requisite, sex. Ah well, i'll just look forward to the next chapter. Everyone here is so perfectly in character and this is the first time i've seen a serious story about a Lass.

In my opinion, the Eevee-family is closer to dogs, although it is of course never specified what animal it is based off. As such, you can safely take some creative license and lose the idea of barbed genitals. :P Write it how you believe to be most interesting or compelling - you're the creator here.

And I see you've introduced your human pairing. *smirks* I must say I would have found it more interesting if Gary hadn't been sniffed out right off the bat and had instead remained a background character, but I'll see where you take this. Having a League victor by her side will certainly be of help to Angel if she's gonna do a Gym run. ;)

Hey im over 18 and I still enjoy pokemon. I’ve always been a fan of the games even if they are kinda kiddie. Well I think there has been a fallout of fanfics lately because all of the excitement over diamond and pearl has died down. But never the less people like me are still here and eager for more. Maybe people will get back into the spirt once the platinum comes out. Anyway good job and I’ll be on the look out for new chapters.

Ps. You know something, you think the cops of all people would have better pokemon. Like maybe a ghost pokemon or something. No use shooting at them it will just pass right through (I think). Oh well if I was a cop id just get a wailord and toss the pokeball above them and when it comes out BOOM! Everyone flattened ah ha aha (oh man im a nerd).