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February 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I rated four. It´s well written, but i don`t get it. Why does Seras like to be spanked, or fucked, for that matter? Normal Seras is erotophobic, and if its Blood Seras, why`s Walter there?
Then, whats the deal with Seras being all excited about getting hurt? She seemed quite displeased when she was kicked and stabbed and all that in the series.
Finally, i disliked the extremely short sex scene, but that´s all that is minus.
All in all, i lol`d, but i dunno if i was supposed to.
Then, whats the deal with Seras being all excited about getting hurt? She seemed quite displeased when she was kicked and stabbed and all that in the series.
Finally, i disliked the extremely short sex scene, but that´s all that is minus.
All in all, i lol`d, but i dunno if i was supposed to.
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February 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hee, thank you so much for writing this! It was very sexy. And I just know Walter must be kinky like that...
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February 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
good news, bad news, and Advice
Good news: Great Idea Great concept I really liked it. Walter does seem to be the type to have a few things in his possesion that would make people blush.
Bad news: I was left wanting. It seemed really short and Just when i thought it was gonna get better it was over, both with the BDSM and the sex.
Advice: Dont be afraid to put alittle more in. Dont be afraid to show them writhing in passion on the bed or blood being drawn. I know I am not the best writer and never will be but this is just a helpful hint from one fiction writer to another.
I think you can do much better and your not letting out your full potention as an author. Dont hold back and have fun. Remember people will judge all your work by the first story they read that you wrote.
Good news: Great Idea Great concept I really liked it. Walter does seem to be the type to have a few things in his possesion that would make people blush.
Bad news: I was left wanting. It seemed really short and Just when i thought it was gonna get better it was over, both with the BDSM and the sex.
Advice: Dont be afraid to put alittle more in. Dont be afraid to show them writhing in passion on the bed or blood being drawn. I know I am not the best writer and never will be but this is just a helpful hint from one fiction writer to another.
I think you can do much better and your not letting out your full potention as an author. Dont hold back and have fun. Remember people will judge all your work by the first story they read that you wrote.