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August 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Bravo! A cute ending for your first fic. Well, you managed to tease out a whole range of emotions (at least from me) and I'll be looking forward to reading more of your work in the future.
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August 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Love "the score." Hehe! I'm sad it's over, but I liked it. And thanks... for saying... thanks? er... your welcome. Tis freely given. I probably woke someone up when I shouted "yay!" upon seeing it. Yay! hehe. and you say you are here for good? I'm glad, and I'll keep an eye out for future stuff!
Good luck, great start!
Good luck, great start!
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August 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Yay! Yay! Yay! Can't wait to see what happens when he gets back home! Though I have a feeling...SQUEEE!!... Anyway, eheh, I knew it was coming, but I just couldn't picture Kyouya's outburst. When it happened, I was so suprised! I didn't expect him to let loose in the presence of the club, but I very much like how you wrote it. It gave me an unexpected sense of... satisfaction? to see Kyouya punch the king for his misdeeds. And you don't have to worry about poetry. The best stuff happens on its own when an especially good idea is had, no matter the medium or intention.
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July 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Love the last lines, both written and Kyouya's spoken. So Poetic! wheeehehehe hooray I love this couple! Thanks for the treat of another chapter...
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July 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
*sniff* somebody pass the tissues, excellent waffy feeling back there! *does the jiggy dance* Now I won't be able to sleep until I read the next chapter!!! Well done!
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July 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
*does happy dance in chair and falls onto the floor*
I must say, you skillfully recreated the scene between Kyouya and Haruhi from Nekozawa's mansion--which, of course, is one of my favorites--if not my most favorite. As a fan of the manga, that particular scene was one of the few reasons I even watched the anime, and I was always wondering just what it was that Kyouya had been thinking when he walked away from the room that night--so thank you for painting that lovely, lovely picture. As for the rest, it was nice seeing Kyouya all introspective for once, since he truly IS the "Shadow King" most of the time. I can't wait to see what happens next.
I must say, you skillfully recreated the scene between Kyouya and Haruhi from Nekozawa's mansion--which, of course, is one of my favorites--if not my most favorite. As a fan of the manga, that particular scene was one of the few reasons I even watched the anime, and I was always wondering just what it was that Kyouya had been thinking when he walked away from the room that night--so thank you for painting that lovely, lovely picture. As for the rest, it was nice seeing Kyouya all introspective for once, since he truly IS the "Shadow King" most of the time. I can't wait to see what happens next.
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July 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Whoa! That leaves Kyouya. Now, I really can't wait to read what happens next.
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July 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
when is Kyoya going to get his chance? I know that time will bring the shadow king and the 'natural' together but i kinda want this to come out with Haruhi in a different relationship with someone outside of the hostclub. All the aside, i'm hooked on this!
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July 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, I think Tamaki's perfectly in character; it's not that I don't LIKE him, just not for Haruhi, or at least, not him alone (hehe, I'm such a perv).
Okay, so this chapter...
I dunno, the sex between the two of them felt kinda, well um, flat. Maybe echoing how she was feeling? That there was something important missing?
The first scene with the twins was deliciously dirty (I mean, come on--a 3P is great!). The next with her and her therapist was sexy, and her first scene with Honey (while the fantasy wasn't PERSONALLY to my taste [not saying that I didn't like how your wrote it, just that it's not my thing]) was good--and the second one was smokin' hot. And I liked the scene with Mori, the right bit of tenderness (and it seemed a catalyst too, for her getting better--between him and Hunny, that is). Somehow the scene with The King just fell a bit short...empty?
Idk, this is just my own opinion (I hope I didn't offend you) and I am enjoying this fic a great deal.
Okay, so this chapter...
I dunno, the sex between the two of them felt kinda, well um, flat. Maybe echoing how she was feeling? That there was something important missing?
The first scene with the twins was deliciously dirty (I mean, come on--a 3P is great!). The next with her and her therapist was sexy, and her first scene with Honey (while the fantasy wasn't PERSONALLY to my taste [not saying that I didn't like how your wrote it, just that it's not my thing]) was good--and the second one was smokin' hot. And I liked the scene with Mori, the right bit of tenderness (and it seemed a catalyst too, for her getting better--between him and Hunny, that is). Somehow the scene with The King just fell a bit short...empty?
Idk, this is just my own opinion (I hope I didn't offend you) and I am enjoying this fic a great deal.
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July 11, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Gah! *chokes and flails about*...
Okay, I'm better now...so anyway, before my brains melts down any more, the chapter...(wow, that's a lot of ellipses, even for me)
I loved Kyouya's song, and how he was looking at her, and how he's in complete denial about his feelings for Haruhi. Tamaki leading her off and his little convo in the alley, however, just makes me want to smack the blond idiot. He KNOWS she had a disorder, and if I recall (correct me if I'm wrong) he agreed (reluctantly) when the rest of the Host Club decided to show their, um, support. I mean, he's funny and all, with all the pouting he does, but he's showing himself to be a bit TOO selfish. (This is in no way criticism for your characterization, mind you--you write your characters beautifully). I suppose I'm showing myself to be a bit too much of a Kyouya fangirl, but Tamaki's attitude grates on my nerves. Either realize (and admit) your undying love to Haruhi, of back off--he's only going to make the poor girl feel bad in the end.
*sighs* sorry, I'm just not liking the King too much right now. And Kyouya needs a good, swift smack upside the head for not going after what he wants (though maybe you're saving the best for last?)
Okay, I'm better now...so anyway, before my brains melts down any more, the chapter...(wow, that's a lot of ellipses, even for me)
I loved Kyouya's song, and how he was looking at her, and how he's in complete denial about his feelings for Haruhi. Tamaki leading her off and his little convo in the alley, however, just makes me want to smack the blond idiot. He KNOWS she had a disorder, and if I recall (correct me if I'm wrong) he agreed (reluctantly) when the rest of the Host Club decided to show their, um, support. I mean, he's funny and all, with all the pouting he does, but he's showing himself to be a bit TOO selfish. (This is in no way criticism for your characterization, mind you--you write your characters beautifully). I suppose I'm showing myself to be a bit too much of a Kyouya fangirl, but Tamaki's attitude grates on my nerves. Either realize (and admit) your undying love to Haruhi, of back off--he's only going to make the poor girl feel bad in the end.
*sighs* sorry, I'm just not liking the King too much right now. And Kyouya needs a good, swift smack upside the head for not going after what he wants (though maybe you're saving the best for last?)