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That was *beautiful*. Other than a few slight problems with typos and grammar (not enough to distract from the story itself), the only thing criticism I have is that L tops. I've always felt that Raito was the more dominant of the pair, though it is plausible that because of his subordinant position (ha!) to L and the necessity of maintaining his unaggressive persona that he submits to L in this situation.

At any rate, you are very skilled at writing as L the person, emotional and passionate, while retaining the logical and orally-fixated mannerisms that define his public personality. I look forward to seeing what you write in the future.

Very good! Fairly realistic, very sweet and kinda sad. Please feel free to continue to play with these two, you do such a good job.