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September 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Good lemon. Not necessarily good FuuxJin. Fuu is too assertive here, too non-virginal. She's 15! Jin should be the clear aggressor, even if he's the quiet one. He's the one with experience. There were a few grammatical errors, but overall, the lemon was good. I just could have been more into the pairing than I was.
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August 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
HAWT. Switch up the length of the sentences to give it a little more variety though. Other than that, FABO'!