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June 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Another well done chapter. and a combination of almost comedy, for this sort of story, with Hiroshi's I can't miss this chance even if I die, attitude, and then we see Akane finally breaking, at least in some regards. She's never going to be the same again.
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June 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Something just occurred to me with regards to Hiroshi.
While Akane's now more honest with herself about how she's changed in accordance with her lifestyle, I realize that doesn't necessarily mean she's gonna start trolling for men and going out of her way to act like a harlot. However, since it's already been established that she's actually comfortable with Hiroshi on some level, it'd be interesting to see her SUGGEST more than just a handjob at some point simply because she was grateful for his ministrations.
While Akane's now more honest with herself about how she's changed in accordance with her lifestyle, I realize that doesn't necessarily mean she's gonna start trolling for men and going out of her way to act like a harlot. However, since it's already been established that she's actually comfortable with Hiroshi on some level, it'd be interesting to see her SUGGEST more than just a handjob at some point simply because she was grateful for his ministrations.
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June 22, 2009 at 12:00 AM
"Tell everyone what you are, Akane,"
That was excellent. From beginning to end, that was a flawless piece of erotica. And truly, that monologue was the perfect climax.
Sorry to be bittersweet, but I am SO satisfied that I have no suggestions to offer right now.
Wait...Maybe one. Assuming you don't have any other plans for Ukyo that are too complex, might I suggest making her Akane's lesbian tormentor? It'd be interesting to see if that breaks new taboo ground for Akane (aside from that one snippet about Ranma-chan performing cunnilingus on her, sapphism seems to be a point of ambivalence for her). It'd definitely serve as a means of demonstrating feelings of betrayal.
Sorry about the real life stuff.
That was excellent. From beginning to end, that was a flawless piece of erotica. And truly, that monologue was the perfect climax.
Sorry to be bittersweet, but I am SO satisfied that I have no suggestions to offer right now.
Wait...Maybe one. Assuming you don't have any other plans for Ukyo that are too complex, might I suggest making her Akane's lesbian tormentor? It'd be interesting to see if that breaks new taboo ground for Akane (aside from that one snippet about Ranma-chan performing cunnilingus on her, sapphism seems to be a point of ambivalence for her). It'd definitely serve as a means of demonstrating feelings of betrayal.
Sorry about the real life stuff.
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June 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very good chapter 7. The detail and build-up is appreciated. Hikaru is making a very good master for Akane. Hope to see more. I could definately see Akane accepting him as her master, although her moral upbringing will drive her to continue to resist.
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June 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Finally some anal. I didn't wanna say anything, but with regards to humiliation, I always look forward to it. Having her push herself the rest of the way onto Gos was a nice touch. It makes one wonder whether or not her butt will become her preferred sexual outlet since it'd be hard for her to ignore how much her orgasm dragged on. Wonder what's gonna happen with that plug of hers. *wink wink*
The enema was the second awesome thing about this installment, but I have to give an honorable mention to the manga idea. That was creative. I wouldn't have chosen bestiality, but the whole idea behind quizzing her on reading pornography was a nice touch.
The condom was a turn-off, but I suppose there will be time enough for Akane to get a sperm enema.
Akane, while not entirely corrupted, has been thoroughly schooled on maintaining the perception of herself as a slut. After getting her more acquainted with anal, I think another masturbation session is in order. I suggest this because she might have difficulty getting herself off without thinking and (possibly) making particularly obscene commentary about her state this time around. It's not gonna be so easy this time, so she'll be forced to be creative.
7 for 7. Good job.
The enema was the second awesome thing about this installment, but I have to give an honorable mention to the manga idea. That was creative. I wouldn't have chosen bestiality, but the whole idea behind quizzing her on reading pornography was a nice touch.
The condom was a turn-off, but I suppose there will be time enough for Akane to get a sperm enema.
Akane, while not entirely corrupted, has been thoroughly schooled on maintaining the perception of herself as a slut. After getting her more acquainted with anal, I think another masturbation session is in order. I suggest this because she might have difficulty getting herself off without thinking and (possibly) making particularly obscene commentary about her state this time around. It's not gonna be so easy this time, so she'll be forced to be creative.
7 for 7. Good job.
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June 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well done. I also was curious as to when you'd touch on Anal. You did a great job of mixing a little reality into a porn story and making it the more interesting for it.
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June 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Enjoyed chap 6, story is coming along nicely. Good developement of Gosunkugi.
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June 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Thank you for implementing my suggestion. It was a well done segment to a good chapter.
There's an interesting nuance to that segment too. Hikaru tells her that she's not a slut and she's just being forced, but he also elaborated that he didn't want her to break. You have to wonder whether he's just being disingenuous for her sake. I wonder if, along the way, she's going to explore exactly what the meaning of "slut" is. Her pleasure [i]is[/i] indeed being coerced. However, her frequent exposure to sex is causing her to uncharacteristically think about sex more often. Does that mindset in and of itself compose the disposition of a slut.
Such a controversy might be what breaks her.
Beyond that, I'm glad you had her ask him for help to break free. I was thinking about that just the other day. With him being so unnecessarily kind to her, I imagined that she would develop some kind of Stockholme-like symptoms and try to run to him when she got scared. When I read that it felt like you read my mind.
And, oh, the Soapland service. That was just....So awesome.
There's an interesting nuance to that segment too. Hikaru tells her that she's not a slut and she's just being forced, but he also elaborated that he didn't want her to break. You have to wonder whether he's just being disingenuous for her sake. I wonder if, along the way, she's going to explore exactly what the meaning of "slut" is. Her pleasure [i]is[/i] indeed being coerced. However, her frequent exposure to sex is causing her to uncharacteristically think about sex more often. Does that mindset in and of itself compose the disposition of a slut.
Such a controversy might be what breaks her.
Beyond that, I'm glad you had her ask him for help to break free. I was thinking about that just the other day. With him being so unnecessarily kind to her, I imagined that she would develop some kind of Stockholme-like symptoms and try to run to him when she got scared. When I read that it felt like you read my mind.
And, oh, the Soapland service. That was just....So awesome.
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June 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh. And one more thing.
"the one place in Nerima where she could feel safe."
I'll be damned if that's not foreshadowing.
What do you got planned you sly dog?
"the one place in Nerima where she could feel safe."
I'll be damned if that's not foreshadowing.
What do you got planned you sly dog?
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June 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful chapter. Very interesting to see Akane's reaction. She might not be a slut, but she is obviously a very sexual person to have such powerful orgasms, and to need that release so badly as to lose control. Nice to see you answering questions before they are asked, such as how can the boys get away with making Akane vanish all the time.
Bondage is all about the fantasy, there is something so sexy about a girl in tight bondage, but the old spread eagle is pretty vanilla. About what you'd expect from a teen-age boy with a limited budget.
I can't believe that Akane is telling her family that she's going to study with boys every night. She must be telling them she's going to a girl friends house.
Bondage is all about the fantasy, there is something so sexy about a girl in tight bondage, but the old spread eagle is pretty vanilla. About what you'd expect from a teen-age boy with a limited budget.
I can't believe that Akane is telling her family that she's going to study with boys every night. She must be telling them she's going to a girl friends house.