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Glad to see another chapter. Not as good as the first but I remain hopeful for the future. The excitment of non-con is watching a reluctant girl forced to give sex and ultimately enjoying it, although she does not accept that enjoyment. Fics where the girl turns into a slut who enjoys being forced and craves it are losing the continuing reluctance of non-con. So I hope you are not planning to go that route. I think it's a mistake to complicate things by bringing in Ranma rather then focusing on Akane who was the star of this story to start with, but you are the author. I'll keep reading as long as it's good.
SailorNemesis

Frankly, if Akane were smart, at this point she'd pack a bag as heavy as she can currently carry and just get out of town leaving a note that she's gone to find Ranma and bring him home, or something along those lines. Just saying. In the meantime, could at least Michio suffer a relatively violent comeuppance, say, at the front end of a moving bus? Just asking. Laters.

Awesome. Everytime I come to the Ranma section, I hope and pray that there's something new....And good. And this was just awesome.

Very well written in it's darkly erotic tone. It's emotionally objective towards Akane and refrains from overdosing the narrative with commentary on how much her psyche was shattered or her confidence is compromised, which helps along a very grainy, macabre decorum. You kept the description of her feelings very minimalist, allowing the fic to emphasize the presence of misery rather than the misery itself. And seeing the heretofore innocent victim--Akane in this case--miserable complements the erotic weight of the rape. I'm glad someone finally realized that rape in a dark atmosphere can be written erotically rather than seriously as though the story was a chick flick.

When it comes to conflicts in hentai, bad endings are the best. So I suggest you keep it dark or it would just ruin the mood. Don't give her an inch. Or if you do, take the wind out of her sale in the end.

And yeah, I do hate Akane, but I just wanted to share that I'd give the same treatment to my favorite characters (Ryoga and Shampoo) while making my most hated character the more fortunate one in my own story. Such is the essence of kink I suppose; our desire to see our favored characters treated conversely in a lemon than how we'd usually want them to be. So I totally understand where you're coming from.

First rate job. I had despaired at ever again coming across a really well written and sexually explicit Ranma lemon on the net. I hope you continue this series for a long time. And if you'd be interested in more in depths reviews and maybe a pre-reader, drop me a line.

I'm all for Akane being rescued, only maybe it's more going from the frying pan into the fire.

I'll offer a plot suggestion.

Akane can't tell anyone 'human' about her woes, But what about P-chan. Might she confess all to him from the need to express her troubles to someone, even if it's a pet who can't understand a word she's saying.

And maybe she'd confess her more and more frequent fantasies where Ranma replaces her tormentors as her dominating lover.



Even had this little bit of dialogue pop into my head today.

"What are you doing. I have photos. I can ruin Akane. Don't you understand."

"Of course I do. That's why I broke your arms, and not your neck. Now if those photos happened to go public. well, then I'd have no reason not to do that. Would I?"

Hi,
I don't think you need to explain your work. That being said, I liked it. Well written and described. Dark, sexy. As you said, porn. Good porn. I hope to see another chapter or sequel with more Akane abuse. (Though I also like the character). Please, no rescue for Akane. I don't need to read about her being saved. If I wanted that, I would not be reading non-con stories on an adult site.
SailorNemesis

I don't know whether this is a criticism or a complement, but you're pretty good at this. Creepy porn indeed, with a bit of plot. Is there any chance of a sequel? As in Ranma comes back and finds out, but is still weak, so they've got to get revenge in a sneaky way that will most probably backfire? Result: Akane has company in agony? I've got a screwed-up thought of the bastards forcing Akane and Ranma-chan to make out while they abuse both girls. Sick and vaguely romantic at the same time. You had Akane keep her hymen, do you think Ranma-chan still has one?