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Well, in a way this is progress. Okay, so "Haido" Ryoga has reared his ugly head, but on the plus side he may be about to do some serious damage to Michio and the others. And even more of a plus, Ranma and Akane finally have allies in Hiroshi and Daisuke, and that's something, right? Well, until the arrival of chapter 22. Laters.

I love your writing, this story is awesome and my husband loves it too by extension (hee hee)

Have you thought about throwing Mousse into the mix. I am quite the fan of his. Just a suggestion, feel free to ignore.

I certainly wouldn't tell anyone how to write their own story.

Keep up the great work :)

I've got to say, I'm surprised how many of the reviews here are good. It's not that the story isn't well-written, just that it's extremely disturbing. I kept reading up through chapter 16 hoping for rescue or something similar, but it just keeps getting darker. I know that's probably the point, but I wanted to say something seeing as all the reviews are good. You need to hear all sides, you know?

This story literally makes me shudder thinking about it. I'm not a rape victim or anything like that, but I was deeply disturbed by it. I hate it. It IS well written, just not my cup of tea per say. That said, I encourage you to add some sort of warning to the description so that people expecting a happy ending will look elsewhere. That way the readers you get will be more prepared for what you're giving them, and less likely to leave in disgust as I did.

Anyway, I hope you continue to write...even if I don't want to read it.
~ Wrin

Welcome back. Another strong effort on your part. I'm enjoying the perversion, but one of the things that really makes me enjoy this story on another level than porn is the character development and the idea that there is a long term story thread running underneath the basic plot. Just what is Hikaru up to, what is his ultimate goal, and will he succeed,or go down in flames like the other boys eventually.

Just a reply to Wrin's comment, though they will likely never read it as they have stopped reading the story. So this is more to those who are still reading, but feel the same way. This is a porn fantasy. It does not reflect real life. Akane and Ranma are cartoon characters. In the course of their original stories they suffered through circumstances that would have crippled and killed them, and they walked away without a scratch. To expect the author to depict them in a real world fashion when they are not real world characters is a bit unfair.

It is perfectly fine to not enjoy this sort of story, but I don't think any other warning other than that already posted in the title page is needed. And finally, this is a very long story, and it's too early to go saying that there is not a light at the end of the tunnel. Things might turn out roses for our victims. Of course you might not like the version of a happy ending this story might have.

Read if you enjoy, don't if you don't.

An interesting lecture/punishment. Perhaps Hikaru should consider a career in teaching? Okay, that aside, I find myself trepidatiously looking forward to 21, if only because Ryoga's coming in full bore, and Ryoga ain't exactly at the wheel! Until then, I suppose. Laters.

I am really enjoying this story, I find that there seem to be a few plot holes in the story but they are minor and honestly I don't care enough to truely evaluate them, plus anything I would argue would only be that I just don't 100% understand the mindsets of those involved and that their actions are explaned by how they feel. But once again over all just a minor thing compared to the greatness-on-a-stick this story is. Very well written and I love how you are so loveingly introducing the bdsm lifestyle! It seems prety spot on from the vague knowledge I have on the lifestyle (for it can really be a lifestyle as a good friend has proven). I also love at how, if I'm not guessing wrong, Gosunkugi is up to something. I am not sure what by anymeans but I love how he is just ever so slightly manipulating things to his desired outcome. I would guess what he was up to but I would hate it if I were even slightly right. I would rather wait for the surprise. Keep at it buddy, can't wait for more.

Is this dead?

I was really looking forward to the next chapter. Part of me expecting you to make Ranma in some manner join in with Akane as Gos' fucktoy, part of me expecting you to have Gos send Ranma next door 'for a cup of sugar' or something equally inane with the orders to watch from the neighbor's window as Gos fucks Akane in the spot mentioned during Ranma's first visit to Gos' house (which complies with his promise to let Ranma watch), which would force her to allow the neighbor to use her. Yet another part of me thinks the next step would've been to either have a geek friend of Gos come over and that Ranma would be his 'date'. The list of possible solutions is endless and it's driving me crazy waiting to find out which way you take it.

Also I really was looking forward to the "gangbang" adventure Michio promised the two, the Ryoga arc, Ranma's first 'encounter' with Hiroshi and Daisuke, and whether or not Ranma would be joining Akane during her next 'Doctor's Appointment'. So many wonderful story arcs yet unwritten, but left in to tease us endlessly. :(

I would love to see more of the girls get traped in this. But you probably wouldn't do that.

Like Kasumi. (I mean I dought many of those guy's could resist the erg to aquire her.

Here's a dark idea to get rid of Nabiki.

Get those guy's to capture her and sell her to Kuno after breaking her in or his sister to do it. I mean Kuno's sister moral standings are very low and likely to even help the boys in exchange to allow her to punish Akani and the female Ranma for getting in her way.