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August 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well. This just made my reading list in a big way.
More please :D
More please :D
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July 24, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Excellent fic. I eagerly await your next chapter.
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July 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Review for Chapter 9:
I love Issac in this. He’s slow, but that’s just part of his charm. He’s so cute. xD I love how the Nintales’ attemots to seduce him went completely over his head. And I was glad to see Alvaro get a chance to fight too; ghost pokémon are my favorite type so I suppose I’m a little biased towards him. Heck, Richard is pretty awesome too. I’m glad for this fight; it allowed us readers a chance to see more glimpses of the personalities of the pokémon you’ve created, and let me tell ya, they’re all chock full of personality! xD Hell, even Claire’s pokémon were just bursting with attitude. I loved it; you put as much consideration and care into creating the pokémon as you would put into a human OC. That’s good; some authors tend to forget their pokémon are characters too.
Evelyn and Draco’s moment before Draco was sent in to fight was so touching and cute. They really do make great partners. ^_^ Draco’s confidence in Evelyn’s abilities and trust in her judgment is inspiring.
Heh, I had a feeling Draco was going to evolve during this fight; it just felt right. I loved the eyebrow wiggling. xD I’ll never get over all of Draco’s adorable quirks. That charmeleon is a spunky fellow!
Teehee! Draco is a breast man! …’Mon. Lol.
Draco’s sudden step into adolescence is beyond amusing. I love how he was so horror-stricken when he realized he couldn’t lay on Evelyn’s breasts any more. Something tells me he’s going to have a lot of trouble dealing with these new sudden urges of his. Poor guy! xD
I seriously love this story. Take your time, but I’d be happy if you update soon. ^_^
I love Issac in this. He’s slow, but that’s just part of his charm. He’s so cute. xD I love how the Nintales’ attemots to seduce him went completely over his head. And I was glad to see Alvaro get a chance to fight too; ghost pokémon are my favorite type so I suppose I’m a little biased towards him. Heck, Richard is pretty awesome too. I’m glad for this fight; it allowed us readers a chance to see more glimpses of the personalities of the pokémon you’ve created, and let me tell ya, they’re all chock full of personality! xD Hell, even Claire’s pokémon were just bursting with attitude. I loved it; you put as much consideration and care into creating the pokémon as you would put into a human OC. That’s good; some authors tend to forget their pokémon are characters too.
Evelyn and Draco’s moment before Draco was sent in to fight was so touching and cute. They really do make great partners. ^_^ Draco’s confidence in Evelyn’s abilities and trust in her judgment is inspiring.
Heh, I had a feeling Draco was going to evolve during this fight; it just felt right. I loved the eyebrow wiggling. xD I’ll never get over all of Draco’s adorable quirks. That charmeleon is a spunky fellow!
Teehee! Draco is a breast man! …’Mon. Lol.
Draco’s sudden step into adolescence is beyond amusing. I love how he was so horror-stricken when he realized he couldn’t lay on Evelyn’s breasts any more. Something tells me he’s going to have a lot of trouble dealing with these new sudden urges of his. Poor guy! xD
I seriously love this story. Take your time, but I’d be happy if you update soon. ^_^
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July 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
keep writing it, this story is pretty good
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June 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I was a little surprised to see a new story with so much content already included.
It was definitely fun to cram it all, though. Only issue I had was with the tiny grammatical errors, typos, and such.
Keep up the good work though, your story has potential.
It was definitely fun to cram it all, though. Only issue I had was with the tiny grammatical errors, typos, and such.
Keep up the good work though, your story has potential.
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June 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story. After I read the first chapter, my interest was piqued. Now, after reading eight chapters, I’m hooked.
I love how you strayed from the usual “kid comes of age and starts their pokémon journey” routine and made it your own. It’s a nice change of pace.
I love your characters; each one is so believable and unique and different from the last. Evelyn is fairly calm and extremely mature for her age. She’s spunky, but not mean. And Draco’s relationship with Evelyn is adorable; they work well as a team and as friends. Draco’s dislike towards human men makes me smile; I think even if he weren’t developing a crush on her he still wouldn’t like them just because he’s so protective of her.
I’m also extremely fond of Blake’s character. A lot of authors tend to take a character, give him the role of “mean guy” and never give him any redeeming qualities whatsoever. His sole purpose is to act like a complete jerk for no rhyme or reason and be the guy that everybody hates. I’m glad to see that you didn’t do that. It was nice to see Blake mature as a person and it was nice that you gave him a background and a reason to explain why he wasn’t the most likeable of people in the beginning of the story. Also, his crush on Lisa is adorable. I’d rant about how cute Lisa is but I think you know enough about your own characters that you don’t need me to continue fawning over them.
You concentrate a lot on the dynamic between Draco and Evelyn; with good reason, mind you; but it was nice to get a brief glimpse at what goes on with her other pokémon when they were at the daycare. Richard came across to me as jealous that Draco gets special treatment above the others. I’d love to see a little more interaction between Evelyn and the rest of her pokémon team in the future. She seems like the type that would befriend all her pokémon so I’d love to see her do more with the others than call them out to battle when she needs them and return them back to the pokéball when she doesn’t. …I especially want to see more of Alvaro; ghost pokémon are my favorites and Haunter/Gengar will always have a special place in my heart for being the original ghost pokémon. Oh, and I can’t wait for the egg to hatch either! I’m so curious to see what pokémon it is; that, and baby pokémon are adorable.
What I love most about this story is that for each question that is answered, three more are brought to mind and left unanswered. You really know how to make a reader desperate and needy and begging for more! xD Haha! Oh dear, that sounded naughty.
I enjoyed reading to this point of Evelyn’s adventure and I hope to see her journey continue forward. It’s not often I discover such a good find in the pokémon section of this site. I love this story, think you’re doing a wonderful job, and can’t wait to see more from you. The summary of the next chapter has especially interested me so I hope to see an update as soon as you can. Thank you for introducing your story to this site. ^_^
I love how you strayed from the usual “kid comes of age and starts their pokémon journey” routine and made it your own. It’s a nice change of pace.
I love your characters; each one is so believable and unique and different from the last. Evelyn is fairly calm and extremely mature for her age. She’s spunky, but not mean. And Draco’s relationship with Evelyn is adorable; they work well as a team and as friends. Draco’s dislike towards human men makes me smile; I think even if he weren’t developing a crush on her he still wouldn’t like them just because he’s so protective of her.
I’m also extremely fond of Blake’s character. A lot of authors tend to take a character, give him the role of “mean guy” and never give him any redeeming qualities whatsoever. His sole purpose is to act like a complete jerk for no rhyme or reason and be the guy that everybody hates. I’m glad to see that you didn’t do that. It was nice to see Blake mature as a person and it was nice that you gave him a background and a reason to explain why he wasn’t the most likeable of people in the beginning of the story. Also, his crush on Lisa is adorable. I’d rant about how cute Lisa is but I think you know enough about your own characters that you don’t need me to continue fawning over them.
You concentrate a lot on the dynamic between Draco and Evelyn; with good reason, mind you; but it was nice to get a brief glimpse at what goes on with her other pokémon when they were at the daycare. Richard came across to me as jealous that Draco gets special treatment above the others. I’d love to see a little more interaction between Evelyn and the rest of her pokémon team in the future. She seems like the type that would befriend all her pokémon so I’d love to see her do more with the others than call them out to battle when she needs them and return them back to the pokéball when she doesn’t. …I especially want to see more of Alvaro; ghost pokémon are my favorites and Haunter/Gengar will always have a special place in my heart for being the original ghost pokémon. Oh, and I can’t wait for the egg to hatch either! I’m so curious to see what pokémon it is; that, and baby pokémon are adorable.
What I love most about this story is that for each question that is answered, three more are brought to mind and left unanswered. You really know how to make a reader desperate and needy and begging for more! xD Haha! Oh dear, that sounded naughty.
I enjoyed reading to this point of Evelyn’s adventure and I hope to see her journey continue forward. It’s not often I discover such a good find in the pokémon section of this site. I love this story, think you’re doing a wonderful job, and can’t wait to see more from you. The summary of the next chapter has especially interested me so I hope to see an update as soon as you can. Thank you for introducing your story to this site. ^_^