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July 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I have to say, I was worried when I saw that it was POV, but 2 1/2 person is an interesting way to handle a fic about a game. This came just in time as well, I was starting to get sick of the needless angst/abuse stories that seemed to oust the normal adventuring inhabitants. Good work all around.
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July 23, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Smalldong Squarepants. It had me rolling on the floor, laughing my ass off when i first heard it. Now, it just annoys me to tears.
That aside, this story is still gosh darn funny. I like it and applaud your effort. I look forward to updates.
That aside, this story is still gosh darn funny. I like it and applaud your effort. I look forward to updates.
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July 20, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I like the p.o.v of this story it's seems tad awkward in a few places but I'm sure it'll get better other than that it's good hope to see more before long.
With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
With Eternal Love, Imasuky Lomae
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July 18, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hey David. Thanks for the constructive criticism. I went and edited my intro chapter and gave my response there.
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July 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Not bad, but try changing the POV. Also, adding some actual smut would be nice.
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July 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well, you've got my attention. I wait patiently for updates.