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September 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Don't recognize your user name, so I don't think you're from Pokegirl.org or the other sites I'm familar with. Regardless, I've got to say that this story is quite interesting to say the very least. Not just because of the character that you've introduce, but also by the detail in the story as well as the use of the Pokegirl Arachnae, one who doesn't see much fun in most Pokegirl stories.
One thing I thought when first reading this was that the main character might be a daughter of a Dildoqueen, which would explain why she is the way she is. Of course, it could just be the way she was made as we all know that such people exist in our world (especially if you've been looking at the news lately). Regadless, this is a interesting tale that I'd like to see more of and I think so would the other members at some of the Pokegirl websites.
One thing I thought when first reading this was that the main character might be a daughter of a Dildoqueen, which would explain why she is the way she is. Of course, it could just be the way she was made as we all know that such people exist in our world (especially if you've been looking at the news lately). Regadless, this is a interesting tale that I'd like to see more of and I think so would the other members at some of the Pokegirl websites.
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September 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Looked you up and saw you there. Good to know that there was a hidden gem among us that was able to provide such an interesting story. As far as the Dryder, I'm must say two things. One, I congradulate you even more then before on using a Pokegirl that is rarely, if ever seen, at all, much less in a good light. As you are sure to know we have perhaps 3 or 4 tauric Spider girls and because of her realitive normalcy compaired to Widow and Dryder, I assumed Arachnae.
As for the the story and this chapter in particular, I really enjoy just how smooth it seems. One thing that I'm constnatly struggling with in my stories is that it seems choppy and forced in some places and rushed in others. It could just be me being my own worst critic, but that's how I feel. You've also made quite the unusal pokegirl appealing and arousing, as both your main character and myself know!
You've got yourself a fan now, so I'll be expecting much more from you, and while I could strive some guesses at what Iris and Clover are, I could very well be proving wrong again.
A final note. As you may know, we have been revising quite a large number of Pokegirls to make their profiles flow better as well as provide information that is otherwise missing. Because of your story, I think Dryder herself could use a tad more fleshing out, if anthing from insperation from your story.
As for the the story and this chapter in particular, I really enjoy just how smooth it seems. One thing that I'm constnatly struggling with in my stories is that it seems choppy and forced in some places and rushed in others. It could just be me being my own worst critic, but that's how I feel. You've also made quite the unusal pokegirl appealing and arousing, as both your main character and myself know!
You've got yourself a fan now, so I'll be expecting much more from you, and while I could strive some guesses at what Iris and Clover are, I could very well be proving wrong again.
A final note. As you may know, we have been revising quite a large number of Pokegirls to make their profiles flow better as well as provide information that is otherwise missing. Because of your story, I think Dryder herself could use a tad more fleshing out, if anthing from insperation from your story.
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September 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well well, didn't expect to see THIS story here of all places... I do so recall some time ago reading this story somewhere... It was excellent then, is excellent now. Though I suppose I'm not that great of a reviewer, it's good to see another PG author here...
Keep up the good work, yes?
Keep up the good work, yes?