rate_review Reviews

Great Story, I hope you continue it!

Love this story!I am hoping that you will continue this story.

Man, this story was awesome, there really ought to be more reviews. I liked your caracterizations, and keeping misaka almost completly in character while turning into a pervert. I gotta say, I really hope that you will continue this one day, no matter when this is, as it would by a shame to leave a great story like this unfinished!

Good stuff my friend, I really like your prose. And your characterizations are very believable, fitting very well with my understanding of them.

I must make one small criticism though, but it is largely unrelated to your writing abilities. In ch. 3 Kuroko's champagne was supposedly imported from Rome, but no champagne is produced in Italy. Sparkling wines can only be labeled as champagne if they originate in the Champagne region of France. Some countries have lax laws about this and allow things like "Methode Champenoise" on the bottles, but in Europe the authorities will seize anything mislabeled as champagne. An example of an Italian sparkling wine would be prosecco.

I know I sound pretty crazy criticizing erotica because of a misplaced region of wine growing, and I guess I kind of am. The French are very touchy about the regional labeling of their wines.

But that was the only bump in an otherwise terrifically graded racetrack. I enjoy your writing significantly.