rate_review Reviews

There are so many things wrong with this story. I'll list them.

1. You're not a very good writer. But you know this.

2. I don't have anything against incest in fiction. It's cool. But I have something against the blatant unrealism shown in this story - if two brothers were to get together, NO ONE would be supportive. And certainly, Tai wouldn't be getting angry at Matt for telling TK to fuck off. That's just insane. Everyone is apparently living in a world where incest is okay, and people get judged for being against incest. What the fuck? If you're gonna write incest, make it realistic.

3. You're very obviously TK biased - and it's disgusting. No one gives a fuck about TK. Stop writing shit that doesn't even make sense just to make TK more hurt or whatever. His mom slapping him and drawing blood? How over the top. She's a WOMAN. He's a MAN. As if it'd hurt a lot. And Matt shoving his mother against the wall is more violent than a slap. He's a MAN. She's a WOMAN. For fuck's sake just because TK is your everything doesn't mean a tiny little slap can be over dramaticised. Jesus.

4. For fuck's sake do not insert Japanese words into your story if you don't even know what the fuck you're doing. You have no idea, do you? Stop making Matt call TK "Otouto-chan". Why? BECAUSE IT'S NOT WHAT SOMEONE SAYS IN JAPAN, AND JAPANESE PEOPLE WILL BE LIKE "WHAT THE FUCK?" IF MATT ACTUALLY CALLED TK THAT. Older brothers DO NOT call their younger brothers "Otouto-chan". They just call them by their fucking name. TK calling Matt "Onii-chan" is okay however, because TK is the younger brother. It's a sign of respect. You know like how you call your mom and dad, Mom and Dad? You don't call them by their names, do you? It's exactly the same as that. Younger brothers call their older brothers "onii-chan" out of respect. It doesn't work the other way around in Japanese society. Matt calling TK "Otouto-chan" (which is unheard of in Japan) is like YOU calling a five year old child "Sir". Hilarious.

There are more, but I've given up.

ohhh im gonna die with out more of this story soon
and it was just updated so this is badddddd!!!
lmao

I recommended this to a few friends too :D

keep it coming Eternalrest :]

Omg there was a tear in my eye :D
I love this story so much!
Will there be more? >:D
And btw go Yama show ja mama who's boss :D

Wow okay any sweeter and i might get a tooth ache or something :p JK hehehe but it was a nice chapter. Now the question is why the hell did nancy smell like butter? lol not that it really matters much just random something that caught my eye :p. mmmmm makes me wish christmas was soon lol i really want my grandmas cookies!

Anyways cant wait on the next chapter oh and wondering when you'll update the others story
hope everything is doing good for you :P

Omg update soon I love your story it's sooooo good!

Well im sorry all that happened that does suck. Well i think the chapter was cute so dont worry about it :) i cant wait to see what the party will be like and the weird random stranger you add to the end of this chapter o.O will be most interesting im guessing. Well i hope every thing looks up for you and you post again soon :)

FINALLY!!! Ive totally missed this Fic!!!!! i cant wait to see how the party goes. It did seem kinda happy lol until the end seems like trouble in the next chapter is brewing :)Anywho enjoy collage hope you can still update regularly !!

First off i both love and hate your right now lol. For no real reason i decided to check and see if any of the fic im currently into have been updated and what do i see yours! which is why i love you! Now it was around 12:20 that i checked and its 12:45 now. Which is why i hate you cuz once i saw you had it up i had to read it right away and i have to be at work early in the morning and should really be in bed but i had to finish this chap. So i hate you too :p hehehe anyway i dont know if its just me but this chap seemed a little rushed and was alright how close are you to being done? Or have you not figured that out yet. Woot i cant wait to read you other story Im glad you enjoy reading my reviews cuz i feel like i tend to ramble in these things lol but then again i ramble when i talk or so my friend says. Hopefully they where also helpful in some way shape or form. Anyway cant wait tell next chap :) wanna see this story finish with a bang!

Glad to see you fixed the chapter. Even more glad to see another update, and happy as hell to see a sexy wet takeru twice in one chapter lol. You know was listening to radio today (Adam Lambert: What do you want from me) and lyrics reminded me of this fic instantly.

Just don't give up I'm workin it out
Please don't give in, I won't let you down
It messed me up, need a second to breathe
Just keep coming around.

Glad to know that it was just a computer mistake with that last chapter its really an emotional one i liked it.i started to read 26 and got lost lol so had to go back to 25 to reread it and noticed that you fixed it i guess lol I must say i like the way Tk found out about Matts attempt at suiside i dont think matt would have really ever told him. Interesting dream he had well at least he is starting to remember some of his past :)cant wait for more !!! I was also wondering about the other story thats a spin off of this one with mmm matts band mate and izzy? just wondering if you were working on that one too or if you were going to wait until you finished this one. Anyway great chapters