rate_review Reviews

you've gotta keep this story going. for your first story this is pretty good. You should add an umbreon or arcanine/growlithe in there for a mix up. (theyre both my two favorites) Hope you add what happens next soon the wait sucks!

great story so far, Electric and ground are my favorite pokemon so this one drew me in with just the title, I can't wait to see what happens next I hope she starts getting facials from pokemon(my fetish) but definatly great work so far

on a side note I do occasionally offer my services to beta read things, I tend to catch all the little things that are off when I read my eyes are drawn to them and i have to read them more then once to have them make sense, I beta read a number of englishwitchs stories a few years ago so if your interested let me know

Again, good progress, man. You did get longer, but it seems a little disjointed between scenes. If you want to remove the PWP tag, go to edit the details of the story, and it'll be at the end of the summary. I'd advise running things through spell check, though, or maybe getting a beta. Your language is good, but your grammar is iffy and there's some typos here and there. Can't wait to see where you go with this next, though.

Pretty good for a first attempt. My advice would be to run things through at least a spell checker if you're worried about mistakes, and to try and add more meat to the story. The writing itself is fine, it just feels short. Aside from cup size, we don't know who Mia is or even what she's doing. Keep it up, though.