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for Haruhi Get's Turned Into a Pumkin

by yamiyugi23

schedule April 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This was pretty damn funny, though all of the spelling errors threw me off. I still liked it nonetheless.
schedule September 8, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Ok. Overall it was good, but I suggest that you work on some things. Your spelling, for the most part, was pretty bad. Get a Beta Reader. The second thing would be your grammar. Again, get a Beta Reader.

I say that, with ALOT of spelling and grammar practice, you could become a really good writer. Otherwise, give up on it now. I'm not trying to be a flamer....I'm just providing some hard constructive critism.(Note the word 'critism', I can never seem to spell that correctly.)

Take it from me, I've been a writer for nearly five years now......and I still have alot to learn! Remember: If you think you're a bad writer, then you are. If you think you're a good writer, then you are.

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