rate_review Reviews

I haven't read to many Loreli or Red fanfics, but this was the best one yet. The story was interesting, the pacing was great, and i actually cared what happened to the characters. I feel we need more things like this on this site. Most excellent.

A good ending, a very good story ^_^ good job

So the whole story had an excellent flow to it. From the first time we encounter Red and our beautiful little Lorelei to the end where Lance finally got his ass whooped and beaten down like he's needed for the longest time. Lance gets canned like everyone hopes, Lorelei gets her rightful place back and everyone is happy. You did a very good job on this story and were wise to end it where you did. Bravo.

This should get good, the ice maiden VS, the Fighting master, the Mistress of Spirits, and the Dragon Tamer....

Im guessing you based this lance off the One in the Manga, I can see that one being the jerk ass in this one. Can't wait for more

I'm getting the feeling that you REALLY hate Lance. Just a feeling though.

This is indeed something that would seem illegal for an Elite Four member to spend time training a trainer that failed to beat them. But onto the story. The story itself is very good. You play out Lorelei rather well. The plot is fluid and easy to follow, a romance is blooming ever so slightly. I just, by reading, have come to hate Lance because he really does seem like this posh asshole who just floats around and doesn't actually try to prove himself against each Elite Four member.

You're doing really well and I'm looking forward to more. Good luck.

awesome, I love this story, its a very well written story, keep up the good work

I'm generally not big on Pokemon fics, but I like where this one seems to be going, especially since I LOVE Lorelai. If you keep writing, I'll keep reading!