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I read this story in one sitting. I am wiping away tears as I write this review. You have fashioned interesting, 3-dimensional original characters and developed the characters from the manga into logical and believable future selves. It was a pleasure to read writing free of the typos and incorrect vocabulary usage that mar so many otherwise decent stories. Most of all, I loved your Sebastian. I believe that he is not as utterly ruthless and unfeeling as many believe him to be. Throughout the manga and anime version, it was obvious to me that some of his actions were not required to fulfill his contract with Ceil, and some probably had a negative effect on the ultimate "tastiness" of Ceil's soul. He covered Ceil's eyes so he would not see his Aunt Ann's body lying in the alley after she was killed by Grell. At the end of the anime, (Season 1), he pulls the little blue flower ring from the water and gives it to Ceil as they travel to the demon island. When he is about to consume Ceil, he gently caresses his face one last time. I was so hoping that he would have a sudden epiphany at the last minute. I was disappointed to hear about the continuation in Season 2. I haven't watched it and I don't think I care to. Instead, I will consider your story as the way things ended. Ceil is happy, Sebastian is happy, and I am happy. Now if only I had a handsome butler to serve me tea and sweets to celebrate....

I loved this piece. i spent two days reading this and alternately laughed and cried at this wonderful world you created from the manga and anime. I thank you for sharing it and i hope to read more of your works when i've totally recovered from this one.

Afrieal

This was incredible. I absolutely could not tear myself away from this story from the moment I clicked on it two days ago. You have done something wonderful for this fandom, my good person. Emotions were portrayed in such a way, the story was written so eloquently, and there was never a shortness in plot. I was hooked, and I'm absolutely raving! I don't believe anyone could have portrayed such a wonderful escalation into Ciel's life with such equisite words and detail, while holding so true to the characters and the cannon, as you have done here. This is only the second Kuroshitsuji fanfiction I've read, and it is already the best one I will probably ever read. I dearly want to thank you for sharing such wonderful story with the rest of the world, as well as my self. This is definitly the mark of a wonderful author, who has an incredible amount of potential. I will also be sharing this masterpiece with fellow online friends who love this fandom as dearly as I.
Thank you, once again, for such a gem.

Wow, I can't believe someone left you a review threatening to get you kicked off the site just because they don't like the story. How childish and just plain stupid. I enjoyed your story. The detail was rich and the characters believable and true to the anime. I did think the chapters were a bit lengthy and some of the building and dress detail did seem a bit too much but too much is better than not enough, to me anyway. This was a breath of fresh air from most of the fluff and filth up here (which I am admittedly a part of!) and I hope after a bit you will write something new.

Very well done. I enjoyed this story immensely. It was nicely written and I never wanted it to stop. You should write professionally. I hope to enjoy future stories from you.
SesssBewitchingBabe

My dear, you did it. You have written the best Sebastian/Ciel lemon I have ever read and, arguably, the best in the fandom. Bravo; give yourself a pat on the back. Unable to gush anymore than I already have these past eight months, let me just leave you with an objective review I came up with whilst reading this chapter. Yes, that means I took notes reading porn. Waddaya gonna do.

~You never referred to either Sebastian or Ciel by their hair color ("the brunet"). THIS IS WONDERFUL.
~Love the time and imagination you spent designing and describing Sebastian's devil-body... although a small part of me is a tad disappointed to think that he wouldn't have a belly-button as belly-buttons are very sexy on sexy men. And devils. Also, I was wondering, is Sebastian's body in demon form completely hairless?
~Grown up!Ciel is awesome. "Now that you're perfectly well again, and we are back together, I will ask you if it wasn't terribly disobedient of you to do what you did to get locked here for ten years, away from me?" is awesome. And really fucking in-character. Possessive Ciel is sexy Ciel. (Would love to see some seme!Ciel in the future, maybe?)
~Old Tanaka is...awesome, and also really in-character, especially challenging considering how little he is really "himself" in canon to begin with.

Most of all though, I'm really, really glad to know that the story isn't done yet!

Keep up the excellent work, I think you have real promise in the world of legit novel writing.


-Sincerely, Meyham

This chapter was very good; very, very good, even. I didn't expect you to draw out the timeline to 10 years, but you've written it well and believably. I'm looking forward to the next chapter... if what I think is going to be in it is going to be in it. I have a feeling you're going to be wrapping the story up shortly, but I habe some tips for you until you do.

Considering how much Ciel has aged, I suggest you give us some more detailed descriptions of what he's like now. Has his fashion sense changed, is his voice deeper, or light and airy; what style is his hair in? You have created, basically, a new Ciel; a Ciel that does not exist in canon and does not have an actual voice or even an image on paper for readers to use as reference. Our imagination can only do so much, and I think one of the qualities of a well-written OC or time-skipped character is that he/she is described in such a way that all readers share bascially the same image of that character in their minds.

You have kept everyone well in-character so far. I felt what might have been a tiny lapse of in-character-ness in this chapter, although that might have just been because Ciel and Sebastian have never, in canon, been in a situation like this before, thus leaving me (and you) without any reference to go by. However, there has been plenty of innuendo in canon as well as in other fanfiction. Therefore, I hold strong to my belief that there is a right way and a wrong way to write a lemon scene for these two, even if I don't consider them a canon couple. I suggest that you go back and re-read your previous chapters with lime content and review your writing style in those chapters. All of your limes have been excellent; write your lemon scene --and your two participants-- like you have your limes. Please be extra careful with Sebastian... you have written Ciel superbly in intimate scenes, but I sense that Sebastian might suddenly become fluffy or overly sweet in the upcoming scene. As in love with Ciel as he may be now, and despite the ten years they have been apart, please keep in mind that both in canon and thus far in this particular story, Sebastian has been a sensuously sexual being. Sensuous. Sensuous, smooth, but still passionate. Think maroon satin sheets, red wine, and dark, slightly bitter chocolate; not cotton candy and Viagra. Any behavior that has not been seen or suggested in canon, I suggest you explain using his behavior and thoughts in previous chapters. Don't leave us wondering 'Why is he doing/saying that?'.

I apologize if I suddenly seem analytical, but I've recently gone back and read some other stories from other fandoms I'd been following closely (before I honed in on this one). Rereading them has only made the difference between your writing and everyone else's more clear. I'm giving you all this advice because I want to see you remain on a completely different level than everyone else, and I want this story to remain one of the classics out there. Your moment to shine is approaching and want to see you blow your competition, and your readers, away!

-Fingers crossed, Meyham

OH MY GOD YESSSS


More coherent review to come later.

Still, so good. I want to say more about it, but really I'm just in utter thrall of your story-crafting skills. I honestly don't care what happens next, whether it's a happy ending or a tragedy, because you've taken us so far and I completely trust you to take us the rest of the way!

Wow, nice! Is that the end though? I hope not. I was hoping that in a few years he would come back and have his devilish way with the boy!