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May 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I love you and all of your stories so very much ;w; The characterization in this is fabulous and just perfectly spot on. I can't get enough of this; lately all I do is prowl the Kuroshitsuji section waiting for updates x'D
guhh, I can't wait for more!
guhh, I can't wait for more!
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May 19, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I apologize for not reviewing chapter 12 when it came out; I read it, loved it, but didn't know what I could say that hadn't already been said. For chapter 13 though, I've got something to say.
I'm really glad that Sebastian was as angry as he was over the way Ciel was treated. I was looking forward to seeing his reaction, and predicted that he'd respond the way he did. I guess that means you got the characterization spot on again! I'm curious to see if Ciel will let his guard down in the next chapter, now that he's got some time alone after everything (and that everything, by the way, was very believable), and how he does so.
Can't wait for the next update!
I'm really glad that Sebastian was as angry as he was over the way Ciel was treated. I was looking forward to seeing his reaction, and predicted that he'd respond the way he did. I guess that means you got the characterization spot on again! I'm curious to see if Ciel will let his guard down in the next chapter, now that he's got some time alone after everything (and that everything, by the way, was very believable), and how he does so.
Can't wait for the next update!
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May 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story. I love it. Thank you.
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May 3, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Glad to see such frequent updates! I also like where this story is going; it's a very believable plot --more detailed than any others I've seen and even less predictable than the actual manga. Very entertaining altogether. I can't say I'm disappointed about the lack of, or anxious for any of the lemons your summary promised. Just knowing that they'll happen (but haven't yet) only makes me believe that they will be even more fantastic than what I can imagine (which, after reading what you've written so far, is nothing). As usual, everyone is in-character to a T and your grammar and spelling are flawless! I still must say, that I am personally looking forward to the prospect of Ciel aging (as in years, not just weeks) over the course of this story; but whether or not that happens is, of course, ultimately up to you and I cannot say that I think I would be disappointed if things did not turn out that way.
-Meyham
-Meyham
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April 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
great is it gonna turn m soon
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April 15, 2011 at 12:00 AM
At first I was wary about reading this fic; I'm not a big fan of shota and, admittedly, the Kuroshitsuji fandom has proven to be a breeding ground for bad shota fanfic. I was pleasantly surprised with you, though. Let me first say that your characterization, especially for Ciel, is spot on. It is always important for writers to remember that he DOES NOT act like other 13 year olds, that he is much more mature and sullen. I love his cynicism and wit. He is not some sobby, submissive child. I am intrigued by the possibility that you may have him age significantly, as it has been decided that Sebastian will stay with him for five more years.
As far as your portrayal of Sebastian and Ciel's relationship, it is also excellent. In canon, there has never been any sort of love between them, in fact, I doubt Sebastian is capable of true love. However, by the second season of the anime I too sensed some affection from him towards Ciel (at least when compared to the relationship between Claude and Alois). I am glad that you are portraying Sebastian the way you are, and that it is him and not Ciel that first realizes something might have changed in their relationship (as opposed to Ciel suddenly realizing that he is in twu wuv with Sebastian). I also heartily appreciate your delay of any real citrus scenes up until this point so that you can flesh out the characters and relationships more... not to mention the plot.
And oh, what a plot it is! As a total Victorian-Edwardian era geek, I appreciate all of the attention to detail that you have poured into this story. I have even learned several new things I hadn't before. However, just between two sticklers for historical accuracy: In chapter four when Sebastian is taking Ciel to find the incubus, it says that he slowed the horses down to a trot, suggesting that the horses were travelling at a speed faster beforehand. Allowing or making carriage horses canter or gallop while pulling a vehicle is, among the equestian community, generally seen as a bad idea. Bumpy ride, wear and tear on the carriage and so on. Also, according to the first speed limit introduced in Britain in 1861, carriage speed was not permitted to exceed 10 mph. At a trot, most carriage horses would already be at that pace, so it seems unlikely that Sebastian would have urged them faster, especially if he was trying to be inconspicuous.
I absolutely cannot wait to read more of this... once I am done writing my final papers.
-Meyham
As far as your portrayal of Sebastian and Ciel's relationship, it is also excellent. In canon, there has never been any sort of love between them, in fact, I doubt Sebastian is capable of true love. However, by the second season of the anime I too sensed some affection from him towards Ciel (at least when compared to the relationship between Claude and Alois). I am glad that you are portraying Sebastian the way you are, and that it is him and not Ciel that first realizes something might have changed in their relationship (as opposed to Ciel suddenly realizing that he is in twu wuv with Sebastian). I also heartily appreciate your delay of any real citrus scenes up until this point so that you can flesh out the characters and relationships more... not to mention the plot.
And oh, what a plot it is! As a total Victorian-Edwardian era geek, I appreciate all of the attention to detail that you have poured into this story. I have even learned several new things I hadn't before. However, just between two sticklers for historical accuracy: In chapter four when Sebastian is taking Ciel to find the incubus, it says that he slowed the horses down to a trot, suggesting that the horses were travelling at a speed faster beforehand. Allowing or making carriage horses canter or gallop while pulling a vehicle is, among the equestian community, generally seen as a bad idea. Bumpy ride, wear and tear on the carriage and so on. Also, according to the first speed limit introduced in Britain in 1861, carriage speed was not permitted to exceed 10 mph. At a trot, most carriage horses would already be at that pace, so it seems unlikely that Sebastian would have urged them faster, especially if he was trying to be inconspicuous.
I absolutely cannot wait to read more of this... once I am done writing my final papers.
-Meyham
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March 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This is very well written, in a very accessible and yet almost poetic style. Very nice! Also, I love how you have perfectly captured the tone of Kuroshitsuji, and in particular the two main characters. Most people seem to have trouble keeping them in character, especially Ciel, who usually turns out to be more needy then in canon: but you write him just as he is, irritable and arrogant, with only the slightest hint of vulnerability showing through his tough veneer. Also, I quite like how you spun the plot to work for you-- I can't wait to see how it all turns out! Thanks for updating so quickly as well!