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I like this story. alot of. DO you make the next chaopter or do you have abandon this story?

A lot of people to this adress want the next chapter too.

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Okay. Good old Ah! My Goddess story, nice general plot idea and things seem to be following a general good pace. But... a few of the chapters are so short that it's almost rather painful. Plus there is an issue with this sentence. "Keiiichi felt himself relax as the cool night air caressed his cheek as drove down the long winding familiar road to nekomi Tech University with his sister Megumi in the side car of his motorcycle." (Chapter 1, first paragraph. As drove? Obviously it sounds wrong so I'm just assuming you skipped over it.

So while I kinda liked the story, I found it slightly boring to keep going chapter after chapter with the slow moving plot. I think it might be better to crunch a few of the chapters together, like 1 and 2, then 4 and 5. Just my suggestion though. Good luck, and maybe if you increase the speed of the plot I might come back and read the rest.