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you missed one pokemon om angie team, you forgot braivery.

YOU HAVE NEED TO EDIT STORY FOR MAKE IT PERFECT

MISTY IS NOT NEED TO RAPED, SHE IS SAVED BY ASH IN LAST TIME, OR SHE ALSO BE ASH HAREM YOU NEED TO MAKE ASH IS POWERFULL POKEMON ESPECIALLY PIKACHU, HOW U FORGET, PIKACHU IS BEAT THE REGICE AND LATIOS, THEN HE EASILY BEAT ANY UNLEGENDARY POKEMON EASILY CHARIZARD IS BEAT ARTICUNO, ITS MEAN HE DESTROY ANY LEGENDARY POKEMON EXCEPT OF SOME MORE POWERFULL LIKE LUGIA, HO-OH, DAILGA, PALKIA, KYOGRE, GIRATINA, MEWTWO AND ARCEUS AND THE KALOS LEGENDARIES U NOT INTRODUCE THEN I NOT MENTION IT ABOUT BEATING DARKRAI, SCEPTILE IS BEAT DARKRAI, WHEN HE FIRST TIME BATTLE, IN THE SECOND TIME HE NOT BEAT, HE DESTROY IT OR MOST IMPORTANT THING U GO VERY SLOW, IN STARTING U GO VERY FAST, BUT AFTER U GO SLOW, BUT THIS IS GOOD STORY IF U EDIT THIS STORY, THEN ITS NOT GOOD ITS THE PERFECT, OR U ALSO CHANGE MEINFOO INTO LUCARIO, BECAUSE ONLY LUCARIO IS ALWAYS MENTION AS AURA GUARDIAN POKEMON, LUCARIO TEACH THE AURA NOT OTHER POKEMON

So far the story is pretty good. However May and Dawn need more dialogue. It seems the story so far is focusing on Cilian, Iris, Annabel, and the other tomboyish girl.

Just wondering when is the next chapter coming out i've reread this story 3 times all 69 chapters

Rest in peace, ssj04mewtwo.

Although we only know you through the internet and only by a single word, condolences can still be given.

Good chap, in the next chap you should have brandon battle anable in a full 6on6 with brandon winning even though anable used her rikou but having been impressed by how much her skill has improved brandon lets her continue traveling with ash. Then paul can have his remach with brandon witch paul looses.

Good chap but I think you could have made the AshXZoey scene longer and rougher

ive been reading this awhile, but ive felt i had nothing to say until now, with Nick, Amu, and Ami's appearance...if there's a gap between games and anime after Unova's done, you plan to drag Ash and co to Orre? ive felt its been underappreciated...and, i'd love to see how you handle aura in contrast to shadow pokemon, along with analbel's empathy in regards to shadow pokemon. it might provide an interesting writing challenge to better yourself with.

also, Nick calling one of his lovers 'mama', and the other 'sis', i loved that. i'd read their continued adventures just for more of that stuff.

Interesting chap, glad to see you used my seggestion for Anible's nickname