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Good chap I like "raw, passionate fucking" how Zoey is a pervert and how you portray iris as a ditz. Keep up the good work.

Ok not as good as the others, infact it was kinda boring. I do have some more suggestions: Ash could give Anabel and Angie nicknames as well like "Cunning Espeon" and "Galant Braviary" respectivly. And you could have Zoey's deerling evolve into Sawsbuck before she releases it or it decides it wants to come along with her, Zoey and Angie could have a tomboy rivelry. Wouldn't be daughters-in-law not daughter-in-laws?

Another good chap, I've already given you a bunch of story Ideas just look through my previous reviews

Good chap and I've already given you a bunch of chapter ideas so USE THEM!

Another long chap, glad to know more about aura. keep up the good work.

A good story, but the latest chapter did not properly format itself, so you might want to reupload it.

Good chap, nice and long but I think you could have done with out the deerling part and put in something else

Well this chap is certanly darker then the others, if Ash does save Misty I think she should go back to kanto because is would be too akward to have her come with Ash and his group.

I think you should have Ash finish Misty off once and for all, have him just compleatly shatter her heart so she knows she'll never be with Ash. And I have to ask whitch costume is May wearing, is it her red one from advanced or her green one from pearl?

I would first like to say that I love this story. It is a very unique idea and has continued to surprise me many times. I hope you keep up the good work.
Having said that, I do have a few things I would like to say. First being that some of the scenes seemed to be rushed or passed over to quickly, and I can understand that going completely into some scenes would make your job harder but it could as some more depth, this problem can of course be solved in the future by going back and slightly redoing the chapters.
My second comment is like the first in that I could like for the adult scenes to be a little more detailed; that can be fixed in the same manor as the first.
Third is the traditional criticism, there are minor spelling errors or grammar mistakes. These is only notice when I reread a chapter and they are far and few between.
I do hope that this minor things I said hope to make the story better and I will continue to read Empathic Adventures until it is finished. Finally I do have a question, after having chased Ash for so long, has Jessie of Team Rocket ever been affected by Ash's Aura that may in the end turn her to his side? It may not make her want to sleep with him but give her a change in personality and fight the other members of Team Rocket (though James and Meowth might side with Jessie). If this is not the case, I do kind of hope that it could happen in the future.

Thanks for taking the time to read my review and keep up the great work.
Nanapriss