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January 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ok good chap plenty of detail, I do have some ideas that you could use in coming chapters:
Riley meets up with Ash and his pary
Ash caches a wild riolu, lucario or medicham or one thats running from team rocket, J or N
Ash and Iris or Ash and Zoey have a battle to see if one of them join the aura sisters
Ash and Zoey have a battle with their anchors cause lets be honest Zoey could learn alot from a powerful trainer like Ash
Ash has an aura vision about the day one of his kids starts their pokemon jorney
Riley meets up with Ash and his pary
Ash caches a wild riolu, lucario or medicham or one thats running from team rocket, J or N
Ash and Iris or Ash and Zoey have a battle to see if one of them join the aura sisters
Ash and Zoey have a battle with their anchors cause lets be honest Zoey could learn alot from a powerful trainer like Ash
Ash has an aura vision about the day one of his kids starts their pokemon jorney
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January 5, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Ok, good long chapter, good cliffhanger But remember what I said about Zoey and Ash having more then 4 girls.
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January 2, 2012 at 12:00 AM
That was a good chap, just for funr I think Ash and May should have a waiger on their match
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December 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
good chap, but I think zoe has been strung along quite enough, in the next one or two chapters you should have her catch up to them and spend the whole thing with zoe trying to convince dawn to continue with contests or try to understand aura and the join the group to keep Dawn in shape with her contest skills.
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December 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Good long chap glad Angie's parents won't be a problem anymore. Also didn't Angie catch a Braviary in Acquiring an Anchor?
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December 27, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Another good chap, glade to see it's longer then most of the others. Keep up the good work.
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December 26, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I'd like to know if you'd ever think of unblocking me... Hmm?
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December 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
It was a good chapter, long and had plenty of drama and good cliffhanger
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December 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Nice long chapter and a good cliffhanger. Too bad you can't make them all that long. I'm glad to see you accepted my idea of having Ash's aura taken out of Iris. I also like how warped my original idea.
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December 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
A good story, but I don't like the 'control the aura' thing that is coming into the story. If Aura was meant to be 'controlled' all the time, to be blunt, people would be BORN with control of it. The natural and normal state of Aura is therefore apparently supposed to be uncontrolled, logically and 'controlling' it is the worst thing that some people could do.