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December 1, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter, I liked the smut scene. I think you should have Ash learn how he can pull his aura out of Iris. I think it's funny that I'm 71% of your reviewership.
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November 30, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Good chapter but you could have explained how Angie woke Ash up.
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November 17, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Iris can't become an aura sister it would be too weird. she's a little kid and if she did become one who would Ash argue with for comedic releafe? Also Cilan needs an anchor pokemon, everyone's sending thiers out and he sends out cannon foder in the last battle with J. Also you could be more descriptive with the sex scenes.
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November 11, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Good story but you miss understand I don't want Dawn to leave but I also don't want Zoey to join the aura sisters. And don't ad Misy the the aura sisters she's to tempermental. Four girls are enough for Ash.
You could have Dawn and Zoey sleep together and then have Zoey fall for Dawn like kenny.
And for a lemon you could some oral or 69ing or some anal.
You could have Dawn and Zoey sleep together and then have Zoey fall for Dawn like kenny.
And for a lemon you could some oral or 69ing or some anal.
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November 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
It's a good story and I think zoey/dawn would make a nice par and ash has enough GFs
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August 24, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I Like How you Protray Iris in your story.
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August 9, 2011 at 12:00 AM
It needs a little more adult contant for this site other than that it is very good