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May 17, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful, #28 Chapter 16B. The scenes, dialogue and things they are doing to one another are off the charts. My remembering of this particular chapter in the other piece of fiction doesn`t have the umph that this one has, very good my friend. I especially like how you get extra feeling out of the two young men. Naughty, naughty.
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May 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
22. chapter 13... If I had known before how sexy one can get in the shower, well.... The scenes, dialogue, tenderness and care are all great. You sort of feel like a peeping tom, although not quite. Enjoyed it a lot. Must keep reading.
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May 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
24. Chapter 14. I remembered. I enjoyed the by play between the two men. The comraderie, sexy looks, dialogue and way Keisuke had takumi hanging there, wow. Well, you have a lot of talent my friend.
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May 16, 2013 at 12:00 AM
OMG Okay, you got me blushing. The tenderness, dialogue, glimpses of where they are are on point. The care that goes into the blonde`s gentle taking of his teenaged love is awesome. Great work.
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May 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Naughty, naughty Keisuke. To be so much into someone is truly touching. The dialogue, the steaming scenes, and the tenderness shown by both men was astounding. Such gentleness and wonder at Keisuke`s care and concern. Awesome my friend.
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May 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
That sexy flirt, Takumi couldn`t keep his hands off his lover. That takes some thought. The sex described, the dialogue and the scene were well within your able fingers to make so. Ouch, Takumi`s leg in that brace makes it tricky to find a good way to go about loving him. Excellent my dear.
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May 13, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 12. I keep forgetting to put down the chapter. Great sexual lust; dialogue superb; scene, a little risky. Wonderful my friend.
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May 9, 2013 at 12:00 AM
How refreshing it is to see young love. Dialogue, setting and of course sex were amazing. The tenderness that Keisuke takes with his young paramor is sweet, and it tells of his feelings for Takumi. Wouldn`t change a thing.
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May 8, 2013 at 12:00 AM
OMG, okay, the flow of the characters lust is such that you want to go over those scenes over and over again. Dialogue, emotions and constant worry of Takumi`s that they need more practice on the passes is refreshing. I enjoyed the tentative way the 19 year old tries to please his lover is amazing. Such care usually comes after years of knowing one another. He is intent on pleasing his love.
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May 7, 2013 at 12:00 AM
At first I thought you were cpoying yourself but then you put more meaning into your words, it was from someone else`s point of view. The way you have Takumi and Keisuke `feeling`each other out is entrancing. Dialogue, the many thoughts of Keisuke, and the blushing of Takumi are all right on point. Takumi isn`t sure about what to do. It`s as though this is his `first date` with anyone. Read on.