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Wow, what a problem poor Takumi has. He likes Keisuke but isn`t sure how to take his loving him. You got the right amount of anguish in Takumi`s thoughts. He never thought of himself like that, any one could see him and think him handsome. I can see where he is coming from though. Him having an abusive father makes it hard for him to see himself as anything but a nuicence. Him wrestling with these thoughts shows he really cares about what Keisume will say when they next meet. Excellent storytelling honey. I will but read on.

Getting to see how the brothers interact with each other and their parents is very interesting. I especially like the way Ryosake teases his younger brother about how his relationship is with the nineteen year old. I enjoy `seeing` how diligent Keisuke is about cleaning his room. Excellent dialogue, you get the feeling that the brothers home is welcoming and that is something else Takumi has not had in his life. Bravo my friend.

I like the byplay that the brothers have, especially how Ryosuke teases his bro about cleaning his room and how Keisuke is now a friend of Takumi. I noted how the threesome interacted and `saw` how aware Takumi was of them especially Tohji. Not sure if there is confrontation in the works but we`ll see. You can tell who is talking to who. Enjoyed reading this piece.

I like how the four friends are talking with such easy comradiery, actually only three. The lady just puts in comments here and there. Akimoto seems like a big `teddy bear`, no disrespect intended. A big man with a heart of gold, who can get things done if necessary. The dialogue is on point, the way they talk is unigue. Confusion is in Takumi, he`s not sure he deserves the brothers support and friendship. Keisuki is scared of chasing away his young friend. Very good descriptive phrases, excellent read.

Very good my friend, I knew there was something else in store for me when you said,"You have to read this." Two small things I noticed, Paragraph 2- fourth/forth, and Paragraph 6- going/goping. The dialogue is precise, you know whose talking. I didn`t get much of a look at the cars. That`s okay. I`m sure I`ll see more of them later.

I`m not used to going by chapters to give a review, just needed to read. Chapters 2 through 9 were a very good read. The terms precise, dialogue very good. Know who is talking to who and can tell the emotions of the characters. A few small problems that I can see, Paragraph 17 in Chapter 5 while/whihe, Paragraph 8 Chapter 7, skirmish/squirmish. The story has been ripping along very well. I am enjoying how confused Keisuke was before he realized he was in `love` with Takumi. His brother pointed it out to him. The way the brothers get along and try to solve their prblems is especially evident in Chapter 9. Excellent my friend.