rate_review Reviews

I just wanted to let your know that I enjoyed your story very much. Thank you for writing it!

I loved this story! For once, a well written Rosario + Vampire fanfiction. I hope you continue this series with the other girls as well (particularity Kurumu). Anyway, good job! I can't wait to read your next fic.

Wow chapter 4 was really intense.

Chapter 5 was incredible! I do hope he gets all the girls, including inner Moka after she teaches him his place. You said you already finished writing this story so I guess there is no point in making suggestions. I will say that it bugs me that in most of the harem genre of anime that the guy doesn't end up with all the girls. I hope there is a twist with inner Moka being bi and outward being straight.

Your writhing is well refined but I did notice on error in grammar when you wrote that Tsukune and Yukari (lay) in bed. (lay) should be (lie) Objects lay, living beings lie. It is a common mistake most people make.

Well, Yukari certainly made a lot of good points about the other girls. And certainly a fair number for herself. I'm curious though. Aren't her parents dead? I only read the manga, so maybe the anime is different, I dunno. Also, if Yukari is your least favorite character, why'd you accept the challenge? Not that I'm complaining, I'm very much enjoying the story so far.

that was very entertaining!

Read both chapters, and so far so good. The characters seem true to cannon and are very amusing. I sincerely look forward to the next chapter.

Personal thing, I REALLY hope Yukari shaves. I really don't like chicks with hair down there, though I'd be fine if she trimmed it down to a small patch.