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Ugh, this stopping point is too cruel! Right when Motoko was finally gonna join the club.

Regardless, most excellent.

Come on let's get an update to this please!

:(

Miss this story 

While never a huge fan of the angst, it probably has some of the most unique, kinkiest smut themes in fanfiction.

Wow. Way to make Motoko absolutely adorable. I'm not even being sarcastic. Just wanna squeeze her tight and never let go. Also kudos on having a Naru I find tolerable (even likable in this case).

I like the new direction and look forward to every chapter. The possession thing felt like it came out of nowhere but this is way better. Thanks a lot!

Would be a hilarious twist if, in ditching the old Motoko arc, you took the opposite tone by making everything she said in this chapter be utter BS to get in Keitaro's pants, lol.

Much better, I think. And the thing with Kentaro being brought up could be really hot, as long as he's not a prick. It's all well and good to say Naru is promiscuous, but it all seems so 'past tense' until she starts fucking other guys too.

When that time comes though, making it as minimally angsty as possible is probably key. Maybe Motoko will help in that regard. What's good for the goose and all that, and I'd like to think that, while not liking it all that much, Keitaro is smart enough to catch on quick. Angst doesn't really suit this fic, I feel.

While it sucks we won't see demon Motoko be a thing, make me wonder what will happen next. Hope the next chapter comes easily.

It's better than before, Naru isn't so....contradictory in what she is saying in regards to their 'relationship'. She still doesn't make much sense to me on the whole, it's hard to really understand the dynamic

Haitani’s gaze darted between Naru and his own hand. Mirroring what he had seen, he smacked Kitsune. The slap echoed in the small room. Kitsune squealed.
“There you go.” Naru turned to Keitaro.
Why are you calling Keitaro "Haitani"?