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Thumbs up. I always like a new chapter. Hope a new one comes soon.

Oh god, you're such a tease. Been waiting for that orgy scene for what seems like forever, but didn't get the swinging I wanted. I suppose Keitaro isn't ready for that, but jesus. TEASE! Really hot scene though. As an aside, I'm finding it hard to care as much about the Motoko arc. Maybe because the fic didn't start out that way, or maybe it's because her character is just a wet blanket over the Keitaro/Naru arc, I dunno.

Really like chapter 30 but I have to admit, I do agree with what 'Jason' said months ago about the story. Naru has gone from treating this like 'free sex'/winning a competition to getting jealous and thinking things were maybe different with him...to now saying she is going to still be having sex with other guys. It doesn't really match the growth we've seen from her as a character to me.

It felt like you were leading Naru and Keitaro together slowly, and yet now it just feels like both girls treat him really poorly.

Neither of them are being fair to him at all.

As far as the girls were concerned, having a male manager in the apartment wasn't a violation. On the contrary, it was an opportunity...Harem.

I feel that this is pretty misleading.

I cry! Motoko is definitely the less interesting subplot in this story, and waiting so long for an update only to get a chapter of her - especially after how the last ended with the tease of some orgy-ish action between Keitaro, Naru, Kitsune and Haitani. It didn't help that it kinda felt icky with Motoko losing control of her body and losing her virginity with it - which is so much more than one's maidenhead...

I hope another update doesn't take as long, and we get back to the more fun stuff. I enjoy your writing!

Hey I wasn't sure if this story was done or not but hey it keeps getting better, keep the good work going.

I gotta say, Kitsune has a funny way of showing she adores Keitaro. Naru as well. There's a big difference between the relationship Naru/Kitsune/Keitaro have and what Kitsune did with Haitani. And from what I've read so far, the only one who seems to have any feelings for Keitaro is Naru, and she seems to have an easier time telling Kentaro than telling Keitaro. From what you've written of Kitsune, Keitaro is nothing but stress relief for her. If I were Keitaro I'd be upset too. It's like the girls did a bait and switch on him. They both screw him first, get him used to a relationship, then spring it on him that it's not a monogamous relationship after he's already developed serious feelings for him. Even after the promise girl revelation, Naru's self-loathing about her lack of devotion compared to Keitaro sure didn't last long. Kitsune and Naru already have him trapped. They get Keitaro to have feelings for them, then spring on him that they're still gonna screw other guys, but throw him the bone that he can screen them first and he can screw other girls, knowing full well he wouldn't want to due to the feelings they got him to have.

This fic really just casts Naru and Kitsune in a really bad light to me.

The time between updates hurts my heart.

I can't wait to see what will happen in chapter 29. So please update soon so I read it and tell you what I think of it. Also Motoko's friend kissing her was a surprise to me. So please update soon.

Muuuuuuch better. A little disappointed the rewrite didn't include Naru actually being a little more naughty (with someone else obv) than frenching another dude, but I'm sure that'll come. Glad to see this story isn't going down that dark path too!