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for Tug-of-War

by thewriterwhocameinfromthecold

person Terego
schedule July 7, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Oh man, the lord of Love Hina returns. Glad to see another chapter with quite a bit of both action and story to it :)
person Anon
schedule July 7, 2014 at 12:00 AM
This is really a very good and well thought story. I liked it from the very first chapter.
person Ryvius
schedule July 7, 2014 at 12:00 AM
New chapter! Hurrah! I've been waiting for this story to get updated!

While I do very much like the action in this chapter (as well as the character development we get from the characters, particularly Keitaro), I do feel the action perhaps favored Naru over Kitsune just a little too much.
The scene with Kitsune at the end was over in like a flash.

That said, this was still a great chapter. Can't wait to see what happens next!

Keep up the good work!
person Terego
schedule June 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Hope you didn't stop writing! This is one of the best stories on the site, after all :)
schedule May 14, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I can't wait to see what happens in chapter 23. I hope that Keitaro gets some revenge when he see's Naru and Kitsune in the motel room. I really want to see if Motoko will make a move to spend some time alone with Keitaro soon. Because he might be able to help her with her problem. Or just hold onto her though one of her symptoms. It is only a thought. If I come up with anything else I will PM them to you
person slingshot
schedule May 6, 2014 at 12:00 AM
there a chance that Mr. Atama might go for shinobu to?
person Anon
schedule April 30, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Excellent use of innuendo and tease. I give this chapter a 9.9/10.
person Ryvius
schedule April 30, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Another awesome chapter! Good character moments and development all around!

Really liked the part with Kitsune, Naru, and Mokoto teaming up to deal with the bullies and laughing together afterwords.

More development for Mokoto is always nice.

Great ending to the chapter! Run Keitaro! RUN! Can't wait to see what's next!



person hugplx
schedule April 26, 2014 at 12:00 AM
I feel like that name at the end was supposed to mean something - something with that Aoyamas? - but i can't seem to remember.

Normally, when you end on a name in that cliffhanger-y way, it does, but given that this story is read in installments, that's a pretty tall order to be asked to remember.
person picajump
schedule April 26, 2014 at 12:00 AM
Up to ch 21 now.

Nice change of pace, letting Keitaro simmer/rest and give the girls some fleshing out.
Hmm I wonder how/if you're going to handle the characters that we haven't met yet.
Obviously Matsumi (watermelon girl) exists, from the note on toy, but that leaves Seto (teacher all love), his daughter Sarah, and Kanako (Keitaro's yandere sister).
Naru's yearning crush on Seto seems somewhat unlikely now, Kenji just took his place in timeline (during highschool, teacher crush).
Kanako was a last minute addition, I thought, to the cast, so I don't really expect her unless this story runs as long as the original.
Much to the disappointment of my yandere kink...

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